Teen Poetry #5 |
Walk Me Home |
xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I tried so hard, Wore out my heart. Stripped away my shield, To protect you from depressions dark. Its not good enough, It doesnt seem to protect you anymore. Each time the sun rises in the morning, The more pain you endure. I cant save you from yourself, I cant even save you from me. You've hurt me too many times, You just cant see. You dont know what your saying, You dont know how you act. Nothing seems to be clear to you, Your world is knocked off track. Reality is titled, Your world is upside down. You've always relied on me, To be the one around. Well i have and always will, You keep pushing me away. You want me to make you better, But u dont wanna be near me. I never said i was perfect, I never promised you the world. Im not your guardian angel, Just a normal girl. Theres nothing more i can do for you, I can just hold your hand. Hoping that you will choose to help yourself, And you'll one day understand. It hurts to much to see you this way, I think i need to just be alone. I cant do this anymore, So wont you please walk me home... |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I love how the last line wraps up the whole poem. It's very good. I enjoyed it alot. Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I never said i was perfect, I never promised you the world. Im not your guardian angel, Just a normal girl. I especially liked this part!! This piece was really good, and I can relate to it so much. It sounds like this person is expecting way too much from you. Even if you love them, there's only so much you can provide. I hope that you are able to let them understand that. I also really liked the way you ended this piece. I enjoyed this poem alot. Good luck with your situation. ~*Nikki*~ ~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Reality is titled.... That seemed like a very important line in the poem. Overall I really enjoyed this a lot, and the last line was awesome too. Theo |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem just like all you other poems I really liked it keep up the great work. Lauren |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Awesome poetry Shugarh... And, I too loved the last line. I agree, this guy (?) is asking for way to much. Just give what you can and then know that's it. I hope this works out. Good luck! Sincerely, Titus "....this time I was mistaken for handing you a heart worth breaking." Nickelback |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I liked this a lot. The title reminds me of that Mandy Moore song. But I liked this better Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
I never said i was perfect, I never promised you the world. Im not your guardian angel, Just a normal girl. Really loved these lines... the whole post was really great! loved this poem!! Allie |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thanks so much everyone..im really glad that you enjoyed it...its a tough situation but im just taking it one day at a time ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
title reminds me of MM's song Things will always end up falling into the right places Think about what I just said thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I love the way you expressed yourself here. Dawn |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
your writing is always a pleasure to read...i liked how you written this out...well done, Michele. =) |
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