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Un Sentido Completo (posting in Spanish)
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Un Sentido Completo (posting in Spanish) |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
For those of you who are non bilingual you wont understand anything else that's said after this sentence muahahahahaha. Para aquellos que si entienden español espero que disfruten  . Un Sentido Completo: Me acuesto en el vacio este que ya me rodea. En verdad triste y desolada, ya se me han ido todas mis esperanzas. El presente tan nublado con un futuro indefinido ya lo unico que me lleva es la brisa debil, que solo me arrastra como paloma muerta llevada en leve vuelo. Una luna llena melancolica pero completa, ya conoce su totalidad pero se sorprende ante la luz de la realidad del mundo que observa. El viento que acaricia mi cara como a la paloma de vuelo muerto yo miro a la luna llena que timidamente se esconde por su velo. Nubes blancas y claras que se llenan de felicidad. Me entra ese cosquilleo desconocido que trato de entender sin embargo no comprendo. Extraño ser como la luna porque ya hace un tiempo estoy sin sentirme completo, aunque mas timido entre las nubes seria grandioso estar tan cerca del cielo.  I see the darkness coming all is bleak... [This message has been edited by Crash&Burn (edited 11-14-2001).] |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Me gusta su poema.  Muy bien Bel |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
sí, era muy bueno. Amé cómo está bien fluyó! "Tell me why you cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Jorge, you write better in Spanish than you do in English. That goes without saying though. I feel like the passion in your writing is much more apparent here. Very well done......I truly enjoyed it and hope things start to complete for you.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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rolly_polly Junior Member
since 2001-10-10
Posts 41puerto rico |
Jorge this was amazing!  I absolutely love it man, very honest and deep, u really went all out with this...i had never read anything in Spanish from you and i must say you have quite a gift here..."Una luna llena melancolica pero completa, ya conoce su totalidad pero se sorprende amte la luz de la realidad del mundo que observa." Gotta love that!  ~parallel universe~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
el didnt i entiende una palabra...BUT, thought it was phinche good.  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Muy bein! Me gusta mucho! 3 out of 5 computers bought today will be physically abused by their owners... |
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K. Rebel Junior Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 40San Juan, PR |
Vistes, el poema te quedo fino mano. Ahi esta todo melancolico pero eso es lo que lo hace bonito. |
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Crash&Burn Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 119 |
gracias por las respuestas me alegro que hayan disfrutado el poema. Los vere a todos por ahi.. I see the darkness coming all is bleak... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
all I know is it's something bout melancholy, moon, stars, sky  là où est mon amour? |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
No entendía totalmente el, sino que qué podría entender tuve gusto. Gran trabajo! Es agradable ver la materia en un diverso lenguaje.  ~*Neblina*~ (Mi nombre espanol)~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
*Tiptoes into the room with a huge grin across her face...* MUwahaha...  OK ok...I cheated...  LOL, I went to a translations page.  SO I didn't get the poem WORD FOR WORD...But, I got the gist of what it was syaing...And if my transaltions were correct, I like the last stanza bunches.  The whole poem was pretty damn awesome, one of the best I've seen from you...Infact, prob. my fav. Thanks for the read, Deary. Twas a good one! Good friends are hard to find, harder to leave, and impossible to |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Cheaters don't count. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
 ....Is this, Is this true Jorge? ....  "I'd rather die purposely alone than to have lived an accidental life of solitude."- Jesa "§ùgã®" Thompson |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
guess what? i translated your poem online and read it! muahahahahaha it was good!! |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Very beautiful and deep. I often have the same feelings  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Well dagum... if I wasn't a darn French student *kicks herself* I could read this... Aargh.. --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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