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Glass Ore |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Glass Ore Glass Ore in my hands like a deep torture that claims, your life's in submission to your reflection Pyrex glass osified By the hands of a shifted wall Thrown away or maybe recycled Now a stone, becomes a slave Sheeps to their grass fields, numbered and tagged turned in circles and, silenced by their cage Earn the claims to a heart and free the history of your once glass heart fallen, shattered debris Shattered glass lie Now running and falling In the abyss, of the less, inside my Glass Ore This poem was based and inspired in the journey of a Pyrex glass guitar slide to the ground and shattering in thousand of pieces. Other elements were taken from real life. Also this would be my last poem here in piptalk. -C.M. |
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K. Rebel Junior Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 40San Juan, PR |
Well carlos what can I say this is a good crazy poem by you again. It was nice especially when I knew that glass slide man jajajajja. |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Oooo i like t his one a lot!! Interesting and somewhat dark..i enjoyed this  keep up the great work!ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hey...i thought you did this one very well carlos. you had the format of this pice down really well. i loved the images you employed as well- especially the one with the sheep. you did an excellent job of the poem..it'd be a shame to see you go...i menas you havent even been here that long.  once again, this is a really good piece. well done with it. |
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