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Teen Poetry #5

Untitled ( Poem )

Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-11-10 09:26 PM

Black clouds, drops of rain,
hits my face like neatles.
Shadows, drives me insane,
I really don't need this.
I can't control it, it's gone too far,
just want this demon out of my heart.

The walls are closing in,
it gets harder to breathe.
Just as lost memories,
are builting up inside me.

Brick walls, closed window's,
everywhere that I turn.
Silense, rusty doors close's
in the dark two eyes burn.
I can't control it, it's gone too far,
just want this demon out of my heart.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-11-13 01:45 PM

This poem was extremely strong and very well written. You expressed your feelings nicely and i always enjoy dark poetry...nice job

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Missthang
Member

since 2001-07-03

Posts 103

2 posted 2001-11-13 05:50 PM

oooo, very entence! i got chills as i read this. good write.
ab

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
-Thaddeus Golas

raiyne
New Member

since 2003-04-23

Posts 2

3 posted 2003-04-24 03:39 PM

i can feel where your coming from even though i can tell some parts came from a deep place.

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