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BrokenAngel
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0 posted 2002-06-20 08:52 PM


Fresh off the pen....


Out of the darkness
And into the sunlight
But just as your eyes adjust to the light
It’s taken away from you
Then you are again cast away into the darkness
You must then adjust to the shift
From light to dark
But how long will it last?

The delicate rose opens it’s petals
To welcome the sunlight it needs
The sweet smell
The softness of the petals
They are all fresh and new
And must adjust to the harsh outside conditions
After coming from the spoils of it’s protective bud
But then
Just as it adjusts
It’s time is over
And it’s luster and smell fades away to nothing

We spread our wings and take flight
We come from the protection of our mother
To the harsh world outside
Thrown into fast pace world
We try to adjust
But just as we think that we have everything done
Our wings are clipped
And then it seems to late
We wither and die like the rose
And are cast back into the darkness
After coming into the light

But there is one thing that makes it all worth it
One thing that keeps us going
That is that after the darkness has passed
And the mist and clouds cleared
The light must shine thru
It has to
That promise is the only thing that keeps us going
The light after dark
And the freshness after the storm

By: Night Angel

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

© Copyright 2002 Hannah Rochelle Garner - All Rights Reserved
LoneWolf
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1 posted 2002-06-20 09:13 PM


i liked this one a lot. good job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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2 posted 2002-06-21 09:10 AM


Interesting

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

BrokenAngel
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3 posted 2002-06-21 02:26 PM


Thanx guys.

~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~

songsoftheaftermath
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4 posted 2002-06-26 03:49 AM


a little cliched..and i didnt like the fact that you put the title as the last line..it kinda gave it an anti-climax instead of building up to it like i think you intended.
but i think it served its purpose well. good write.

could the darkness be my friend?

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