Teen Poetry #5 |
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Lonely Star |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL ![]() |
"Lonely Star" a lonely star shines down from an empty sky forgoten by all noticed by none isolated from all life knowing only the darkness which surrounds empty and alone dimly shining within the black abyss i now see that lonely star shining not from the heaven but from within my heart which silently prays with each passing day that a love so true shall find its way so that it may shine brightly for all to see so that it may no longer be a lonely star forever hidden inside of me It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. I've learned that even when you th [This message has been edited by LoneWolf (06-22-2002 02:49 AM).] |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Wonderful poem. Aside from a few typos, i thought I would point out to you: "from an emt sky" "I know see that onely star" and I'm not sure if you ment for it to be like this but "so that it may longer be" not sure if you forgot a word or not, but all in all, a wonderful work. ~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~ |
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Faerie Lick New Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 9Curious, so curious |
"a lonely star forever hidden inside of me" I've felt like that lately. I'd like to think that we all have stars inside us. Some just show more than others do. Some burn out. I hope yours doesn't. I think your star is pretty. Hey, look at me. |
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songsoftheaftermath Member
since 2002-06-19
Posts 84a world of disarray |
i love the last stanza....i can relate to it well. good write. could the darkness be my friend? |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
what can i say....another great one!indeed i feel like a lonestar as well.i feel like the light is dimmed but ready to burst forth yet,hinderances linger.i feel an inspiration to write such a poem right now...lovely one lonewolf! Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved. |
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