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Through my Car Window
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Through my Car Window |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Through my Car Window My gates My Helen of Troy Your horse through my car window sometimes you're running down so slow too catch a fragment of you galloping for the next-- different story same shame surreal framing like an excluse depository no one here anyway Sometimes you're trotting Juliet calculating the passing ship the mountaneous road All of this through my car window. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hey I like this one! I like the way that you slipped that horse theme in there and kept it there! Right on! It takes more work to love myself than to love others... I guess that explains it, eh? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
calculating the passing ship the mountaneous road not sure exactly how i feel about this, the thoughts were a bit blurred- like watching the scenery from a car window 
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Foz, I'm very frustrated... Very frustrated... PIP DELETED MY COMMENT!!! MAAH! So, I'll repeat my long winded praise... *ahem* SEAN!!! You incredible poet! AHH!!! *so jealous* Who knew scenes through a car window could be so different...so magical. I love your reference to Helen of Troy. Where do you think of all these things? I'm afraid I'll have to kidnap your brain. MUAHAHA... I'm running out of words...you've left me speechless...AGAIN! Not a bad thing, of course, I still have to learn to shut up. But yeah, back to the subject... You have this extremely awesome style...so awesome, in fact, that I'm forced to use the "n" word..."Neat". And I NEVER use that word, unless I've been fully impressed. FULLY IMPRESSED!!! *you get my point* It's a good thing. *Martha Stewart ate my cat* *cough* I love your work. You have such a unique talent...NO! Gift. You are definately high up on the poetic charts of awesomeness. *needs to buy a new thesaurus* ^_____^ FOZZY BEAR FOREVER!!! ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i love this piece. honestly. uh, excuse my ignorance, but helen of troy? yes, i've spent my life in a closet eating cheerios, care to enlighten me? - jen so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
*bump* stupid fast forum...bah. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Sure, Helen of Troy was in ancient times, the most beautiful woman ever. Basically, the point is, she started the whole friggin war that Odysseus fought in, you know against the Spartans or something. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very interesting hmmmm...i liked it! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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