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Teen Poetry #5

if you read this, you'll like it

chas
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 101
Lynn, ma

0 posted 2001-10-18 12:22 PM

here is a story,
once told before,
about a life of a child,
but not a boy  anymore,
he has grown in appearance,
but  not in the mind,
the things that he do,
is due past his time,

he is bless with the fact,
that he is just like his dad,
is that something to be proud of?
Because his eyes are so sad,
in the course of his years,
no father was there,
but the boy is a man,
cus he can't shed a tear,

as time would go on,
no changes were made,
he lives his life like,
just like the old days,
remembering his suffering,
holding on to the past,
the pain that's inside him?
How long will it last?

He likes to think back when,
when he was young and bold,
he listens to no one,
never did what was told,
but maybe he should of,
because he never did see,
how hard it was for his mother,
to be both mommy and daddy,

as time grew older,
so did he,
he is having remorse,
i believe he is feeling a little bit guiltily,
The actions ones takes,
effects mainly others,
think not of oneself,
and you will understand better.

This story is over,
for now it is,
but more will come,
for he will have kids.
And what they will become,
is no laughing joke,
troublesome rugrats
Holy smokes!!

well, forgive me if you did not like it. but what i hope to get out of you was a wide range of emontions, if not i need to improve. and also forgive for trying to add a "life lesson" at the end.      thanks for the time....chas

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-10-18 01:34 PM

Yea, this was definately full of emotions but i personally loved the poem...it reminded me a lot of myself in a way..great job hun

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

2 posted 2001-10-18 05:59 PM

I agree with xShUgArHiGhx, full of emotions and a mirror of many feelings. Thank you for sharing.

Charisma

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