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last dance [repost] |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz 
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For all of the times you said to me 'here, we’ll go for ice cream or maybe a soda', and ran off with the leaves down the street. For all of the times you brought orange juice and root beer just to leave me [forget, neglect…ignore?]out in the sun for a few hours too many. Tying together the laces of my boot, you somehow hold it all together until I trip on the last dance.
so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
this is a great poem...it makes me so sad that this is true for so many people..good job. me |
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Knight of Secrecy Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 113San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great story-like poem, very good, -CM. |
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BlackDove Junior Member
since 2001-10-14
Posts 18Why are you reading this??? |
Nice flow and word usage here!! rock on!  All the plastic people who live without a care.Try to sit around my table and never bring a chair... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interetsing way of discribing a last dance. i enjoyed it, Jenn  =) |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Yea i agree, i thought this was a very interesting way of describing a last dance..i enjoyed it a lot though! Great job and keep em comin! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
well, it wasn't really about a last dance.  but thanks for taking the time to read. /jen/ what if they gave a war, and nobody came... |
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