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Teen Poetry #5

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BlackDove
Junior Member

since 2001-10-14

Posts 18
Why are you reading this???

0 posted 2001-10-15 09:21 PM

Lovely love on a lonely night
Seeing you here is more than a sight
I asked you not leave
But you ran in spite

You come here but you know it's too late
So before I talk to you, I think you should wait

I'm immune to your criticism
and your false apologies
You call it realism
Tired doxologies

So before you turn and walk away
remember to lock the door
so you won't be back to stay...

All the plastic people who live without a care.Try to sit around my table and never bring a chair...

[This message has been edited by BlackDove (edited 10-15-2001).]

never_a_princess
Member

since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

1 posted 2001-10-15 10:10 PM

heyy..good job buddy! my fave part overall was definitely.."critism"...or was it..criticism?? :P haha. j/k. good poem. kinda sad but very nicely written..as are many of your others you've been so kind as to let me see. btw..dun let this shtuff i say go to your head or anything! :P luv ya Ewokz.

~Anna *waves*

Friends are angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly.

NathanS
Member

since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
CA

2 posted 2001-10-16 07:05 PM

good write

My fav part was

"So before you turn and walk away
remember to lock the door
so you won't be back to stay..."

I really enjoyed the read! Thanks!

-Dreys

Angel Bee
Member

since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

3 posted 2001-10-16 10:05 PM

I liked this. Good poem, keep wrting! ab

*~We are all pencils in the hands of God --Mother Teresa~*

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