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NathanS
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since 2001-09-27

Posts 106
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0 posted 2001-10-06 10:17 AM

Well, i dunno how good this is, its different from my usual writing styles... just thought id share it.

Titled: "The Wick"

                       A
                  Single flame
              From a cloth of wick
                       So
                   burned the wick
                 as the cloth withered
                         The
                    darkness from behind
                   grew into an larger dejection
                       It
                   emerged from the murky
                 depths, hidden by the flame
                      Spinning
                 complacently in the air
              swaying so delicately as it burned,
                    Out
              let the light not vanish, fear
             strikes at any moment
                  Time
             is no guardian
           Control lies in our hands.

           -Nathan

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-10-06 12:50 PM

Nathan, I like this......its fantastic. I wish I could write like this

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

2 posted 2001-10-06 08:41 PM

Wow... I like this one, but it did confuse me the first time I read it. Good going!

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind".

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-10-07 02:27 AM

man, that was a well written poem...i liked it

If you dont reply to OTHER peoples poems,are targets(peoplewillburnyourhouseinfuriousrage)*ahem*we dont want to put that title on our foreheads,do we?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 10-07-2001).]

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-10-08 12:15 PM

Nathan this is so awesome!! i loved the format...did you hear? LOVED the form..its awesome..i love the way it looked like a flame and a wick at the same time, and although the content was a bit tricky to follow, it made a lot of sense. very well done on the effort you put into this one. i enjoyed it HEAPS!!!!

wouldnt it be wonderful if children werent scared of looking up at the sky?

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