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mistic
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since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-09-24 06:06 PM

ok this one needs a title and i can't think of anything. so ideas are welcome

and yes this is just another dark one. nothing wrong.

Changed images floating in my head
Destroying my mind with every passing turn,
So life changing
That it makes me cry.
No hope in calming my imagination
Where I welcome the shouting
To silence my mind.
A blank face staring back at me,
A haunting mirror image of what we've done
That rakes my mind with worry.
No stopping it
No comfort to come
Until a time has passed with hopeful relief.
So now I sit and wait
While I fall to pieces
As my world crashes to the ground.

Life is an open book with many unwritten pages, write something that's meaningful to you there.

Alyssa

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since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

1 posted 2001-09-24 07:00 PM

awww
this one was good!
i loved it!

"I swear officer! It was PINK."

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-09-25 07:47 AM

Yes it is dark, you're right there. I do like it though. It's something I am feeling at the moment.

"No hope in calming my imagination
Where I welcome the shouting
To silence my mind.
A blank face staring back at me,
A haunting mirror image of what we've done
That rakes my mind with worry."

That part I can connect with particulary well. It seems to speak to me (wooo) and I understand that feeling all too well.

Thanks for sharing this. I enjoyed it quite a bit.

~AF~

Kookaburra sits in the old gum tree, merry, merry king of the bush is he. Laugh! kookaburra LAGUH! Kookaburra how gay your life must be.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-09-25 08:02 AM

This one was reaaaaaaaaaaaally good!! Pretty dark but i love dark poetry...you expressed yourself wonderfully!! Great job and keep it comin!

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

4 posted 2001-09-27 06:28 PM

thanks for replying everyone

i hope to post some more soon...

aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

5 posted 2001-09-27 07:30 PM

       "So now I sit and wait
        While I fall to pieces
        As my world crashes to the ground."

SIGH...been there, done that and I'll probably be doing it again next weekend.

Great poem.  Everyone knows how it feels when everything just falls apart.  Nicly expressed.

Ex Animo,
     Aaron

pure_innocence
Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 80
Colorado, US

6 posted 2001-09-27 09:49 PM

Empty Comfort maybe? Never was good with titles but I thought I'd give it a shot. I liked the poem, very well done. Particuarly, the shouting to drown the silence in my head. There have been times where I've wanted something anything, to keep me from thinking, perhaps I interpret it wrong, regardless though, I liked it greatly.

Zukene_Chic
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since 2001-09-26

Posts 152
Cali

7 posted 2001-09-27 11:56 PM

Classy. Very gothic. I liked it.

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