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Teen Poetry #5

What's it Worth?

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-09-19 10:58 PM

Vagrant storms are raging near,
Ladies weep and soldiers cheer,
What’s it worth if children fear
The very thing we all hold dear?

“Kill them all!” I’ve heard them cry,
Nevermind how many die,
“Nuke ‘em all, let’s watch ‘em fry!”
I feel dark times are growing nigh.

Silent tears are loudly shed,
Gone unheeded as we fled,
All dressed up with silk and thread
What’s it worth if we’re all dead?

Walls of stone and walls of clay,
Each’ll fall to disarray,
What’s it worth to win the day
When our own kids we lead astray?
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Just one I came up with moderately quick..I'm not satisfied with the ending..I think it needs another stanza or something...but my poetic reserves are sapped at the moment. Might work on it later.
-Adam

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-09-20 02:33 AM

Adam,
there is so much I could say to the topic, but that isn't the point......the point is the poem, and I think you did a good job.

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2001-09-20 03:31 AM

i liked this poem it was very good and well written.
robin

bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-09-20 11:02 AM

This was well written and extremely sad...powerful piece

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-09-21 11:40 AM

You said it buddy and definitely couldn't have done it better! This is exactly what I am thinking too. Wowsers...really well done. You've pinned those thoughts perfectly and the flow on this was bloody fantastic!

Killer job!

~AF~

"Hi there, can I relay a sonnet your way?"
"Go away"
"Come on"
*dials the police*
"Alright!..."

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