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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-09-09 11:59 AM

What you see before you,
is merely a act of courage,
I'm trying to tell you,
how I really feel...

This is difficult for me,
cuz i care so much for you,
and I know how you play around,
I also know that you're a player.

It's like a bad dream,
that keeps reappearing,
every time I see you,
I fall back in love.

Is it your eyes?
Or is it your smile?
Your simple charm?
I think it's all of the above.....

~death is certain, life is not~
~How can we be friends if everytime I look at you I know thats all we'll ever be~

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2001-09-09 05:16 PM

This poem is gooooooood. *LoL* Juss think bout this...is this guy really worth it?..girl you know you deserve better..I am juss worried bout you!!!~Jess

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2001-09-09 05:18 PM

jess, i know ur worried, but u dont have 2 be.....

~death is certain, life is not~
~How can we be friends if everytime I look at you I know thats all we'll ever be~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-09-09 07:17 PM

I really think you might need to seperate from this person if he's causing so much pain on you like you explained in the first stanza....ummm....but yea if you're really in love then it's easier said than done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Delirious_Smurf
Member

since 2001-08-08

Posts 90
Nothingness,P.R.

4 posted 2001-09-09 11:03 PM

Ack sorry to hear bout the Mr.
I hope everything works out fine...
Good poem too..I liked

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-09-10 03:37 AM

It's like a bad dream,
that keeps reappearing,
every time I see you,
I fall back in love

darn it...LEAVE the player behind!! you deserve much better, sure they might be charming and sure they're smiling at you and holding you and kissing you, but if they're doing that to you and then going and doing the same to sumone else then i dont think you should compromise your happiness for this certain player.
once again, good job on the poem SG.

"Somehow I managed to single handedly betray myself" Javier Agosto

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-09-10 07:58 AM

Unfortunately some people no matter what they do to you always win you over with w/e it is thats so special about them again and again and again...i think we all have atleast one of those people in our lifes where we are completely helpless to them...great poem

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-09-10 12:14 PM

So you're a glutton for punishment and heart ache, eh?

You need to let go of this person. Life isn't meant to be causing you this much pain and sadness. Only by leaving this person and this part of your life behind will you ever truly progress.
One thing you should just fix up is this line, "is merely a act of courage". There should be an an in there.

Keep writing and smile!

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

8 posted 2001-09-16 02:41 AM

Letting go is WAY easier said than done. I know what you're thinking..."Maybe I can change them though.." Deary, don't put yourself through that torture. I think the poem could have been extended at the end...But all n all is was a pretty darn good write.

United we stand, Divided we fall.
Never say die.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-09-29 01:19 AM

Knowing yourself that this person is a player, you should take the initiative to stay away from him. i know you're very much attracted to him, but all he's gonna cause you is hurt. Find someone who'll treat you like a princess and believe me, you'll be much happier. Thanks for sharing

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Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

10 posted 2001-09-29 06:24 PM

I liked this poem... it shows a real sensitive side here. Nice job expressing your emotions.

Jenn

"In the words of a broken heart, it's just emotion taking me over; you'll never see me fall apart, in the words of a broken heart."

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

11 posted 2001-09-29 11:36 PM

I loved this poem I hope everything gets better fo you.
Lauren

jenifeather
Junior Member

since 2000-02-21

Posts 31
Here

12 posted 2001-09-30 12:17 PM

dear i know how you feel. i went though the same thing. it's hard but hey it makes for great poetry. i hope you figure out what is best for you and in the mean time keep writing.

jennifer

who's gonna pay attention, to your dreams
who's gonna plug their ears, when you scream
-the cars

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