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punkyfreak
New Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 6

0 posted 2001-09-04 02:10 PM

I never asked you to leave

You never said where you'd go

You never said anything to me

So how was I suppose to know?

You listened to everyone's hearsay

But never once asked me anything

I called at first a few times a day

Until I figured out your call would never come

I felt abandoned I felt so stupid

I couldn't believe you would

But in the end you did

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-09-04 03:41 PM

Sad poem! This is one that I can relate to! Good work!

~ Alex

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-09-04 05:31 PM

Punkyfreak! I liked this one BUNCHES!
Though you started with a bit of rhyme sceme and then let it fade away...
Anyway, I like what you are syaing in the poem...I can relate in ways. Thanks for the read.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2001-09-04 11:55 PM

I felt abandoned I felt so stupid

oh i liked this one a lot. the way you wrote it reflected the emotions within this. the spaces made this one feel so bare and empty and in a way really quiet.

im assuming that this is directed to nedaj- i hope you're feeling fine now though..just a little thing which i found amusing- nedaj is jaden backwards- cool huh?

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stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

4 posted 2001-09-05 09:56 PM

I really liked this..and I've been there so I really connected with it. feel speshul, this is the first poem I've connected with in a while...being the first poem I've read in awhile and all. but I really liked it..short and sweet

keep it up!

I am woman, here me roar...MEOW!

Don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile. :)

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