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Sven
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0 posted 2001-06-04 02:03 PM


*Gallery Reading Room*

do my words reveal
what I can't conceal?
does my heart feel
this love so real?

or, do I conceal
what I really feel
when words appeal
and my heart reveals?

has the pain I feel
in my heart been healed?
my words a seal
to pain so real?

or is it a spiel
to get you to feel
when I appeal
with words unreal?

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-06-04 02:05 PM


Riddles seem to like me today....I shall ponder....
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2 posted 2001-06-04 02:06 PM


Sven, your work just amazes me. You are beyond talented, My Friend. Enjoyed!  

Sauni

Sauni :)
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I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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3 posted 2001-06-04 02:16 PM


The last part..I loved...I always try to make people feel.  Great ponderings, Beautiful Heart.
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4 posted 2001-06-04 02:41 PM


Done deal!   I enjoyed the twisty turns of this Sven!
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5 posted 2001-06-04 02:46 PM


Sven, hello

Good question. Certainly my primary goal is make people feel something, so it is my poetic responsibility to make sure I am not padding the work.

Could read this poem with several avenues of
meaning.

theLadypoet

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6 posted 2001-06-04 08:13 PM


Lady in White, there are riddles everywhere these days. . . thank you for pondering. . .

Saunni, thank you so much. . .  . . . glad that you enjoyed. . .

Temptress, glad that you liked it. . . I believe that we all try to make people feel. . .

serenity, thank you for reading my friend. . .

Ladypoet, thank you. . . I'm glad that you could see the different layers of this. . . it's what I was trying to get across. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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7 posted 2001-06-05 01:38 AM


Either way...you'll get no complaints from me.  I often wonder 'is it real, or is it Memorex' when I read you...then I just think to myself it is always your heart talking.
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8 posted 2001-06-05 08:52 PM


big grin for you my friend  
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9 posted 2001-06-06 10:11 PM


I agree with JLR no complaints here from me as well....always a treat to read your words Sven...


Lauren~


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Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."


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10 posted 2001-06-07 01:10 PM


rj, you've got the right idea. . . thank you my friend. . .  

WS6, thank you!!  And here's one for you!!  

Lauren, always a treat to read you as well my friend. . . thank you. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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