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Martie

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0 posted 2001-06-02 11:13 AM

Slipped into Dreams

A light rain woke me
to full alert
trying to decipher each small sound,
my ear off the pillow with intent.

Could not be rain
from a clean sky, I thought,
recalling yesterday’s blue.
But, what was that swept in
at dusk
and whipped the palm trees round?

I could hear its intent now,
as soft as midnight,
combing the leaves in the champhor tree.
I could hear them droop
and touch new air,
picture their small bright heads
glistening from the hall light.

Just before the sound of ground
sweet tranquility opened a silver spin of web
around me wrapped with jewels,
and slipped me into dreams of you.

In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-02-2001).]

Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

1 posted 2001-06-02 11:16 AM

oh kool i get to be the first to read this an say how i enjoy it so,you are one gifted
poetess

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-06-02 11:16 AM

Beautiful.
Sweet dreams

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-06-02 12:19 PM

Martie....Impossible to improve on Interloper's comment...so I will not try. Bob

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-06-02 12:21 PM

One thing I appreciate about your work is it's so clear and easy to read and the flow takes me along. The images are clear and precise, specific I like that and it is an excellent work.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-06-02 12:23 PM

Martie what a description/image this is....

                "Just before the sound of ground
                 sweet tranquility opened a silver spin of web
                 around me wrapped with jewels,
                 and slipped me into dreams of you."

Martie you are such a precious Poet...you see through the eyes of a poet!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-06-02 12:38 PM

Martie~
You sweep me away with your imagery ...
a brush of gentleness in sway.
*Hugs*
Love ya'
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-06-02 02:38 PM

Oh but if I could see through your eyes only once, just once! Sweet dreams my friend.

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

8 posted 2001-06-02 02:42 PM

Just before the sound of ground
sweet tranquility opened a silver spin of web
around me wrapped with jewels,
and slipped me into dreams of you.

beautiful words, martie.

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2001-06-02 05:06 PM

Martie,
This poem is as lovely as you. Sy

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

10 posted 2001-06-02 05:21 PM

what smiles you bring me as I say....when I grow up.... {~,^}

I do believe I've been Martinized yet again....

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2001-06-02 11:13 PM

I could hear its intent now,
as soft as midnight,
combing the leaves in the champhor tree.
I could hear them droop
and touch new air,
picture their small bright heads
glistening from the hall light.

Just before the sound of ground
sweet tranquility opened a silver spin of web
around me wrapped with jewels,
and slipped me into dreams of you.
==============================

that last verse is worth its weight in poetic gold....
this is wonderful imagery...and ya NEEDED the rain, right? *S*

Im looking at your last few poems...
are you trying a new style?
perhaps working on succinctity? or is it just me?

Im searchin for my warrior
walkin the tracks of time
this struggle to seek forgiveness
like chains and shackles...these ghosts of mine

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

12 posted 2001-06-02 11:27 PM

so pretty, Martie.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2001-06-02 11:54 PM

Watersign--thank you so much for such a nice comment.

Interloper--Yes they were.

Bob--thanks so much for letting me know.

Kathleen--I'm glad that this was so...appreciate you letting me know.

Eric--and your reply is precious to me.

Marge--love and hugs to you!

Sharon--You'd have to wear glasses to read...thanks for being so sweet.

Sunshine--If you don't ever grow up, then neither will I.

brian--I'm always glad to see you.

Sy--How nice..

Janet--You are perceptive...so that part is you...the rest is the answer, yes.

Hi Michael...thanks for reading this, my friend, and for the pretty.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-02-2001).]

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