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Open Poetry #14

poem - it feels like dead

PoemCrazy
Member

since 2000-11-30

Posts 159

0 posted 2001-06-02 10:49 AM

it feels like dead to do poems like this

a new medium,
like screaming into the wind.
no one can hear you then.

usually, i scribble on paper and hide it.
and the ones i show it to
don't see me watching,
every little movement they make.

if you watch the eyes,
you can count the lines as they read them.
and you should know where they pause,
it's your poem.

if you watch the breaths,
it's syllables.

it's good when the pace changes.

breathless?
not what i was going for,
but then,

the real poetry is in the interpretation,
right?

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2001-06-02 11:08 AM

right ... but feels like dead?
You seem more than alive to me ... as does your work

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

2 posted 2001-06-02 11:18 AM

marvelous writing,i enjoyed

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

3 posted 2001-06-19 01:59 AM

breathless?
not what i was going for,
but then,

the real poetry is in the interpretation,
right?

Isnt it funny how two people can read the same words so differently?

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