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Fledgling |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I used to believe I could levitate. I would call my parents to watch and wait As I showed off, skipping across the yard, Convinced I could fly if I tried real hard. I swear I often soared above the ground But never when witnesses were around. Then years embedded my soul in concrete I could barely move, much less jump to greet Purple martins dancing in a blue sky And ambition to be a butterfly Became only a distant memory As I curled in a ball of misery. And with my back pressed up against the wall The only support preventing a fall Into the blackness always beckoning me, I lived in uneasy proximity To a chasm waiting my one misstep - I cried for assistance; there was no help. Chains bound my ankles, crushing flesh and bone I was mocked with failures; joy was long gone I pretended hope but despaired to find Relief from the chaos of my own mind. But then your love emerged, a warming sun. In pitiful parody of a run I hurried to your protective embrace And saw acceptance of me on your face. To my apprehensions, I say goodbye And with your hand in mine, at last, I fly. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This is marvelous....for I know this feel.... and I know every line.... yes....marvelous! |
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theLadypoet Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 97Or USA |
suthern something in your words sang to me... maybe because I've hunkered down on a wall next to you. Fly...little 3 letter word that says freedom. I am agoraphobic and sometimes do so long to fly. Thank you for sharing this poem. theLadypoet "A woman is like a tea bag, you never know how strong she is until she gets in hot water..." Eleanor Rooevelt |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Sometimes the pityful parody of a run matters not so much as the hand awaiting us. Enjoyed the passing of time and experience this spoke of. And finally...the reward! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ This is just sooooooo beautifully written. Each line with wings, waiting to fly ... and then she does ........~ So very lovely. So deeply felt. Love the mention of 'purple martins' ...  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
soar high suthern. . . lots of great images in this one. . . love the line about purple martins. . . really good. . . I used to do this. . . think that I succeeded once when I was about 11. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I used to pretend I was Peter Pan and wanted to fly! Kathleen Blake |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth..Yes, you can fly...your words always do, even when sad..they fly on the wings of a poet, and are beautiful! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I swear I often soared above the ground But never when witnesses were around. Then years embedded my soul in concrete I could barely move, much less jump to greet Purple martins dancing in a blue sky And ambition to be a butterfly Became only a distant memory As I curled in a ball of misery. ================================ We are all butterflies waiting to happen Ruthie... some of us just take longer to get our wings. Your cadence on this floats like a butterfly...it always does...as its one of your pens many gifts...another being..your ability to emote and evoke emotion with such impact and power. And we can always relate and see our selves in your words. very well done poetess girlie-girl.  I'm hanging on your every word |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
In my dreams I am often a bird, flying high in the sky, searching for some magical cloud upon which to land, so that I may have a birds-eye-view of humanity. This poem has an ethereal quality to it, with overtones of sadness and joy flying wing-to-wing. Thanks for sharing such wonderful imagery. Midnitesun, forever trying to be in tune with the loon [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 05-30-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You almost had me crying until you revealed this....... "But then your love emerged, a warming sun. In pitiful parody of a run I hurried to your protective embrace And saw acceptance of me on your face. To my apprehensions, I say goodbye And with your hand in mine, at last, I fly." But I might have known that you were going to ressurrect yourself into heavenly bliss... whew I'm so glad for you! Great poem I enjoyed it thoroughly! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my dear friend....you have always flown  Beautiful by the way |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Decaflame: Then you know how much I hoped I hadn't laid an egg with the telling. *G* Thank you so much for that marvelous! *G* TheLadyPoet: What a wonderful comment... thank you so very much! If we were at that wall simultaneously, I wish we'd known. *S* The companionship would have been welcome. And that reminds me... welcome to Passions! *S* JLR: You're right... When your goal is in sight, form really doesn't matter. *S* Stumble, lurch or crawl...just get there! *S* Thank you! Marge: Sweet lady, you are so very kind... and I thank you sincerely! *S* I do love martins... even when I'm hanging clothes out to dry on a line too near their nest and being dive-bombed! *G* Sven: I KNOW I succeeded... more than once! *G* But only my cats were there to see... and they weren't telling. *G* Thank you very much! *S* Irish Rose: Would you believe I always felt sorry for Nana, left behind, fretting and worrying? *G* Thank you for reading! Martie: You dear... I can't tell you how much I appreciate the way you always see beauty even in my sad words... I can only thank you very much! *S* Janet Marie: Naw... *G* I will gladly accept (and relish! *G*) the compliment of floating cadence, but I'll never be a butterfly. *S* But that's okay... I have more than a season of love to give if someone can accept less color, beauty, and grace in exchange for more substance (and flapping... though that might be jaws, not wings! LOL.) Thank you so much... my pen sure does appreciate your unwavering support of its offerings. *S* Midnitesun: I thank you so much for a wonderful comment... especially considering that even your name shares imagery! *S* Welcome to Passions! *S* ethome: Dern it all! LOL. And here I had the kleenex and TLC all ready for dispensing. *G* Thank you so much, kind sir. *S* Resurrection is an ongoing process... thank you for enjoying this episode. *S* hoot: Dear lady, I simply followed your magnificent example. *S* Thank you very much... it's so good to have you back! *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 05-31-2001).] |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok, am late, I know, seems these days I never catch up.....sigh...but this is wonderful lady, love the way you lead the reader through this... from: I could barely move, much less jump to greet Purple martins dancing in a blue sky to this: I lived in uneasy proximity To a chasm waiting my one misstep - to this To my apprehensions, I say goodbye And with your hand in mine, at last, I fly. *jellybeans applauds * |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Written from a heart that knows pain and knows the beauty of love...this is a powerful piece Suthern...it's got an amazing feel to it...such darkness and then the flight into the light...may you always soar in the light sweet lady. Excellent writing~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
jellybeans: Be as late as you need to be, dear friend... your responses are worth waiting for! *S* Thank you very much! *S* Butterflies_dont_cry: Thank you so much... both the sweet comments on the poem and the wishes for the poet are greatly appreciated! *S* |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is a fantastic piece of writing, Ruth! Very very well done! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good day to think on flying.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, If you can't be a butterfly how about joining us moths. Beautiful write. *L* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Those words flew! I hope your journey is a wonderful one. These words I know well, and I wish you the ability to soar! "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Bravo! Excellent Suthern! Oh, I could feel this one so perfectly. I've been there within these emotions you've described ... amazing capture of the sentiments, really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'm loving this one!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Denise: Thank you so much. *S* I appreciate your read and response! *S* Sunshine: But blondes don't always think so well? LOL. You sure confused me by resurrecting this one, lady... but thank you! *S* Seymour: I'll just observe the beauty of both... okay? *S* Thank you, sweet man! Mysteria: Thank you, kind lady. *S* Your compliments and wishes mean much to me! *S* Kit: Oh, geesh! *G* Your wonderful reply had me wanting to bow and curtsey... not a good idea for a klutz with vertigo! LOL. Than you so much... you truly honor me. *S* PDV: And I'm so glad! *S* Thank you very much! |
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