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A Gift, Penned
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A Gift, Penned |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
A Gift, Penned to write, thus, to pen vision's intent in line and deed and voiceless rent to give dream and in dream, unpent that desire of desires of all intent ~*~ this came in silent gift from this, my lover's world a feeling of loud the voice held in kind unfurled round then round my heart the tender lines have curled but not, he'll hear not the love he has thus churned and in this loss, this deepening dark, an ember's flame still burns ~*~ to write, thus, to pen vision's intent in line and deed and voiceless rent to give dream and in dream, unpent that desire of desires of all intent ~*~ and thus incumbent, I am sworn by haste and chaste and corm to carry forth outside the norm but not lie fallow, to not waste a moment of my sweet’s require to flame this darkening ember’s pyre to challenge those who yet not dream ah those who only design the scheme to rid one of a song’s conquest from this my breast would wrest ~*~ to write, thus, to pen vision's intent in line and deed and voiceless rent to give dream and in dream, unpent that desire of desires of all intent ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great write Decaflame! These are the words you left as a comment for my work... "this came in silent gift from this, my lover's world a feeling of loud the voice held in kind unfurled round then round my heart the tender lines have curled but not, he'll hear not the love he has thus churned and in this loss, this deepening dark, an ember's flame still burns" Reminds me of a famous poet's style and I can't remember which one....great writing and keep up the good work!! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
that the "famous poet" goes unnamed suits me well, Ethome...for it was a poem that you had posted, and yet another this morning that was read, that fanned this penning.... so I curtsy, to you, and the other poet, for sparking yet another penning... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Truly a work of art, Decaflame! Beautiful! ~Tier |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You get a "P" on this one Decaflame, and that of course if for perfection! A wonderfully worded poem. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A gift you have. this was perfectly penned "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Tier, I thank you for reading... Mysteria, a "P" might also stand for poignant, as I am still quite far from perfection... for which I shall always strive... |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Brian, you snuck in on me....not fair...but I do curtsey, and thank you.... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Decaflame, This is just incredible!!! I truly loved this piece and its beauty. Well done! Michael Proust- |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Awesome! Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sigh* Every time..I come away shaking my head because your writing is so amazing to me that I don't have the words to say how much I enjoyed them. |
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Death Member
since 2001-05-26
Posts 112Twilight |
A gift given gives none leads who is not lead no deed goes unrecorded nor yearning unscorched in sky times enveloping infinity opens the singular heart brave be they who upon seas unseen would sail markthe fathoms ropeless but pure by feel determination sparks lungs breathe ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This poem is quite outstanding in voice , in form and undenibality Your Servant I have a friend who once said-"Sooner or later, Death makes a believer out of just about everyone." |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Thank you all for allowing me to pen my thoughts and feelings....you are a wonderful audience.... so much talent.... I shall continue to aspire.... |
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