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The Moon and the Poet
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The Moon and the Poet |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The moon that made the sky its home one sad and lonely eve bemoaned and softly cried aloud "why did the lovers leave?" they turned the forests back for miles and drained all of the lakes the mean ole mayor clasped his hands “let’s cash in whate’er it takes” the town that once had been so small was now just like a city the moon was forced to watch it all in sense of somber pity years passed the moon slept long in smoke and lights of men in dreams one day to see a change where love would shine again the drive-in held the moon in awe, Travolta there would climb into the sky and proudly sing but the lights would die each time "if you kill the cars' exhaust I'd be your only light drive-ins would be dreamy I'd be your awesome sight" not one adhered to Moon's request so soon he lost his voice and slept again until a time for when he’d have no choice he woke one night long after that and saw a lake was built he shone far down and cast his light 'pon world that made him wilt "why this could be a meeting place for lovers to come and play and I can light the waves for them when night turns from it’s day" so the moon was quite well recharged from years of sleep and sulking it shone passed all the smoke and haze to see who’s hearts were skulking months did pass and not one would come those that fished would soon be gone when stars would show up with the moon they’d always be back at dawn this one last night the moon would cry he heard a mighty sound as if a giant heard of beasts had come to tear the ground the park was full around the lake from every side it went and the moon, for this, raised its light to shine through every tent some people pointed to night's sky the moon was full of pride “leave all your cars as offerings and I will never hide!” then just under, there was a noise a BOOM and then the cheers of all the people watching him he’d waited many years mushroomed sparkles soon peppered down and children whooped their delight no one had come to see the moon who was always there at night when the finale was bout o’er the moon began to sob doors were closing and engines revved not one said “Moon, good job” later as the moon was weeping and dimmed his lights thus so a poet walked into the night so sad that he must go the moon looked down and through his tears “please don’t leave” he cried that night “I must,” the poet softly sighed “for twas you, my only light.” the Moon woke up and shined on down and the poet sat and cried for some can see what others don’t in beauty, they both had spied [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-25-2001).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
walt- oh yeah!! i love this!! this is way cool...awesome!!!  i love the moon, and it's so true that many take it for granted...not appreciating the light it brings or realizing it's incredible beauty.  wonderful write!!  ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 06-24-2001).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Walt...yes I can see why you like this one...it is spectacular....wonderfully done  |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Cool piece! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, you've told this story so well .... splendid Walt! You've given such character to the moon, felt the emotions, wove the story nicely indeed ... and what a lovely ending. Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh darn it, you keep WOWing us all the time... several images came to mind, for us who love the moon... the vast golden orange orb that comes up at harvest time... that lover's moon of spring.... that great man who smiles down on fireflies.... and the huge light that cast just enough bright to make night seem to be just an overcast day.... Well done sir! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oh yuh i went to a fireworks display at the lake last night and i was just noticing how the moon was gettin no attention o yuh and how hidden it seemed to be. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walty~Walty~Walty~~~ You KNOW how I love this one, right ? Thank you for sharing your experience with me. Nightly I see the fireworks display from Disney World ... and yet the moon has more sparkle than all that pyrotechnic stuff ! (and not noisy either)  Thanks for the story, sweet poet of measured treasure. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
When I see the moon in full I think of you and get butterflies. When you kiss me on my lips it's like the fireworks we saw last night. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wonderful story. Reminds me a little of the children's book "The Giving Tree". Do you know it? I like the way you gave the moon such an emotional nature. Really enjoyed this. Sandra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o yuh catalina i know it thats muh fav author Silverstein Marge o YUH! Wife hehe O yuh to you all! |
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Fandaen Junior Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 47Ft Worth, Texas |
I sit here humbled at the skill with which this was written. Very enjoyable read. |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Oh wow, I loved this! People take for granted so many things....but not everyone. Great poem.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
The moon is indeed awesome and you have personified it so well, Walt. Excellent writing here!! All writing comes |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
You guys like zee moon? Go out and tell it (God) so!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Walty, this is beautiful, absolutely stunning, just like your Moon Love it! Maree |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
The moon need not fear - as long as their are poets, the moon will be appreciated. I liked this a lot. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I enjoyed the story and I love it when the moon comes alive. Maybe we should listen more often Liz |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Even more high praise o yuh! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walt, you amaze me! You've grown poetically since you first came here...I hope you NEVER stop giving us a glimpse of YOUR world..moon and all. |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
this is quite constructive. i think ive made a new friend, tha moon and all. i just wish i had all tha time in the world to tell you how each indivual line of your poetry mooves me. well, i guess i also wish i had some more time in the world to pick your brain all day long. interesting people rule! kind of like tha subjectandtitle of this poetically crooze |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
It's sentimental, emotive and I liked! Thanks for it Walty...  K |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Walt bent my ear to bump this up due to its 4th of July sentiments and look its already the 5th. Poor Walt. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Walt...James |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Elisaeyes...a little aftermoonglow doesn't hurt anyone.... |
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