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I sit here wondering
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I sit here wondering I sit here lonely by choice and circumstance no longer understanding my own life wondering was there a single moment of determination if so did I not notice, or simply ignore it if so…if I’d known would I have chosen not to love you I sit here wondering You sit there protected by denial and disillusion still a false participant in your own life closing your mind to the moment of reckoning when it comes will you stonewall, or simply surrender when it comes…since you know will you chose not to have loved me I sit here wondering |
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pamela08 Junior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 27California,USA |
love is something powerful that we will never figure out...well written it is better to have loved then to have never loved at all true beauty comes from within not from without |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Was it choice or is it change? Will we ever wonder? Curse or blessing? We write . . . Krawdad |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
UH HUH....hugs |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sometimes, it's better not to wonder. . . great job with the poem. . . a lot of emotions going on here. . .  ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
all i can say here is that i love it,it is so full of emotion, |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Love the one thing we all crave and the one thing we understand the least about. Eternally we wonder.....This is a wonderful poem with heartfelt emotion in it. Thank you for the read and the thoughts it gave me. {{{BIG HUGS}}}Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. |
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theLadypoet Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 97Or USA |
One of the definitions of poetry is word useage that makes us feel. This poem sang to me. Thank you for enriching my day with your beauty. theLadypoet |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You'll never find out I guess Love is unpredictable, it comes and it goes, but one moment you'll feel it in your bones that "this is it". Unfortunately, sometimes it takes many rehearsels to get a good play. So keep rehearsing. Loved your poem. Titia |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
JLR- Great poem with sad ending, probably about a great love with an unfinished ending(also very sad). |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Don't think about it......just live. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
There are so many things to wonder about like stars etc.Sit here just wondering that I enjoy your poem very much |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is fairly matter of fact, which such an edge of melancholy. I like it. I like how you ask questions without the questionmarks - it's a technique I use sometimes...helps to add a touch of finality..and it shifts the tone of the poem too. Do think that maybe these two lines: 'lonely by choice and circumstance no longer understanding my own life' contradict each other a little bit? I'm not sure it matters if they do...I just wonder... Good work, JLR  K |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
pamela08---So very true...thanks for reading. krawdad---Curse or blessing...I have also wondered. And so, as you said, 'We write...' Thanks for your poetic response. Paula---I knew you'd get it! Thanks. Sven---sometimes, I do think too much. Thank you as always. Watersign6---Glad you enjoyed...thanks for responding. Startime---Love, the eternal wonder...in so many ways. Thanks. Ladypoet---Thanks for your generous words! Titia---I think perhaps this was the 'good play'. So glad you enjoyed. walker---Odd to consider an ending...unfinished. But so true! Thanks. Laura---I will if you will. Ha! Thanks, kiddo. vandana---What a nice thought to wonder...thanks. Severn---Exactly! The puzzlement of a loneliness chosen more from neccesity than reason. Thanks for your thoughtful comments. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I know loneliness, this is so utterly sad. Kathleen Blake |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Loneliness can eat away at the very soul. I pray you find true happiness. "What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
JLR, goodness, I so have been there. Wish I could explain it also but there is no need. You took the words right out of my mouth and said it better than I ever could! Enjoyed! Sauni Sauni :) |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I think I might have mentioned it before but I love your style of work its very direct and powerful, I read quite alot of your work, I may not reply but I enjoy it very much, and this piece is no exception. Thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Powerful.... Thanks Connie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh this one just cuts me deep... my goodness...Im looking around to see if you are peeking in my windows... you wrote me so well here... hauntingly well written JLR... lonely is something that can own us... take care jm she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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