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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-05-27 11:07 PM

In clothes worn for days
half laying, half sitting
the stench of sweat
the stench of fear.
Quite contemplation takes hold
as your eyes scan
for that movement
one you silently hope against.
Boredom, exhaustion
the suttle way the wind
takes hold of the leaves
as the flutter by.
Sudden fits of sleep
within a nightmare
of absolute tranquil moments
that you remember from home.
Can you see her face,
looking back at you
through the dust of violence
in a land not your own.
The single crack of a bullet
brings you to autopilot
as find the target
and put it down.
Then the nightmare of time
the single one you cannot control
takes its place again
and you wait for the end.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-05-27 11:20 PM

Sudden fits of sleep within a nightmare...intensely written and enjoyed!

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

2 posted 2001-05-28 09:29 AM

They say that time heals all wounds, but perhaps it doesn't take away all memories. Very profound.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

3 posted 2001-05-28 01:04 PM

all i can say is WOW! i am speechless,great poem

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2001-05-29 10:21 PM

Then the nightmare of time
the single one you cannot control
takes its place again
and you wait for the end''

have been there too many times to count, haunting but so nicely done...peace to you..

Lauren~

***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-05-29 11:45 PM

oh, my, I wonder what it might be like if we could in fact slow time when desired and speed it up as well

it's all relative

we're told

of course, a time for slow for me would likely disagree with a time for such for you

so if we walked beside each other, would we not warp ourselves and our appendages

maybe life would look like a carnival mirror dressed in waves

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-05-31 07:14 AM

MichaelG~
Vividly emotive.
The nightmare of many who have served.
May their nights be freed of the memories.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2001-05-31 07:25 AM

Deeply moving piece with the atmosphere of such terror well captured and points well taken!! Thanks for sharing Michael!

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