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Open Poetry #14

The one

Toyy
Junior Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 16
Reno Nv.

0 posted 2001-07-06 08:35 PM

The one

Isn’t it amazing
How two lovers in the dark
Can see each other
A night spent
Touching
Loving
What ecstasy
To be touched
By your warmth
Knowing how
Wanting
Finally
Feeling
Your face
Your lips
Your love
Your light
Your passion
And in that passion
I long for your love
I long to be the one
To set you free
To be the one
To make you smile
To be the one
To give you love
Just to be the one

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-07-06 08:59 PM

I think you've got this "one" down right....

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

2 posted 2001-07-07 12:47 PM

The short, rapid lines lead one after the other falling in perfectly with the yearning you describe in your poem...a wonderful write!

~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2001-07-09 01:57 PM

Just loved this one.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

WhiteDragon
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 70
O-town, Fl

4 posted 2001-07-09 02:25 PM

Very nice, it has a good flow to it. Keep it up. God Bless

Jeremy

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