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Crimson Dew
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Crimson Dew |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Crimson dew which life sustains Trickles down the pale remains A shaft of light reflected in Sanguine beads of cardinal sin A mist envelopes cobblestone Cloaking what was left alone By silhouette kept out of sight Becoming one with the night... (Copyright 1993 by: MARK V SHELDON) "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This one has a spooky macabre quality to it. I like it anyway. Good write, Mark.  All writing comes |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks, Lone Wolf -- thought I'd post something a little different, though maybe I should have waited 'till Halloween...? -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice and creepy, halloween in July is a good thing. I like that so much better than July 4th! Sandra |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Oh sheesh...why is this making me think of Jack the Ripper.... well done, Sir.... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Got to love Halloween, Sandra -- it's a much more "interesting" holiday... just thought I'd post something a little different than my usual stuff... thanks for reading. My Lady: it was between Jack and Drac, though I was picturing more of the Count when I wrote this... I wanted to try my hand at a simple and succinct Gothic style... Thanks for your reply. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Mark, The Crimson Dew has a surreal quality to it. Perhaps there is a ghost from some other era lingering amongst the droplets! I like this novel approach to your writing... Elise |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Elise, for replying. I think this was simply a dark, Halloweenesque impression where I tried to be extremely concise with the phrasing, yet very intense in the imagery/allusion to the color red... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Crimson dew which life sustains Trickles down the pale remains A shaft of light reflected in Sanguine beads of cardinal sin ================================== oh this is very cool...I love a good Vampy poem LOL cryptic and imagery rich... very cool vocab and phrasing and the cadence is perfect, this was a treat to read aloud succinct with impact and intensity.. very well done POEet sir  We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Enjoyed the imagery very much. Nicely done. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow...this one packs a punch......very good! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
exquisite job of imagery, here! I do think you want envelops rather than envelopes, though. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
JM, thank you much for your encouraging words. This one is one of my favorite ones to read aloud, as well. Poe was in the back of my mind with this one... Poeminister: thank you, too, for checking this one out -- I'm glad you enjoyed the "pictures", even though they weren't that "enjoyable" :-) A "punch", eh SEA? Was that pun intended? (more red imagery...) ;-> VAS -- thank you so much! Great catch on the word... yes, I did indeed mean "envelops". Let me change that... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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