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The Illusion |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Softly the night wind blew in my face, whispering words for me to chase. Thoughts of you better left undone, memories I hoped would leave with the sun. I thought you finally erased from mind, back in the past and far behind. Slowly the images drifted in, unbidden, unwanted, they started to begin. The tender touches, the close embrace, beguiling looks crossing your face. Silvery tones of words you spoke, they had all faded away like a wisp of smoke. Sunlight finally came my way, thankfully I greeted the brand new day. I looked over my shoulder at the vanishing dark, it seem you waved at your depart. Hopefully the sun would burn you away, but I knew in my heart you were there to stay. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
One word, Logan: GOOSEBUMPS! It's amazing how deep certain roots can plant themselves in our hearts, minds, souls, and lives... You've captured this concept of a haunting past incredibly well. Thank you for the read. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Logan, this is so emotional, it's so hard to let go, and even harder to forget. Another wonferful write, my friend. Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Logan--Well done, emotive read. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
that is the harsh reality my friend. . . no matter how hard we try to get rid of them. . . they'll always be there. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A wonderfully penned poem, and I kept it too! If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Mark, thank you for the read, and yes, the roots can twine deeply at times..gentle smile Ahh, Sandra, my friend, thank you once more for your kind words and being here..very gentle smile Martie, your thoughtfulness in your reply, coming from you is very touching to me. Thank you very much...gentle smile Sven, thank you my friend for your comments, which are so true..Best to you...gentle smile Ahh, Mysteria, I appreciate you saying that, and for the keep..very gentle smile |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 You have a beautiful way with poetry, Sweet One. I love this. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Silvery tones of words you spoke, they had all faded away like a wisp of smoke. Sunlight finally came my way, thankfully I greeted the brand new day. I looked over my shoulder at the vanishing dark, it seem you waved at your depart. Hopefully the sun would burn you away, but I knew in my heart you were there to stay. ========================== Loved the imagery in this Logan...as well as the cadence..this was a treat to read aloud... but tis the sentiments that shine in this... those traces left behind...somethings never leave us...but then...somethings never should  very well done poet of the gentle smile *S* take care jm We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A wistful write of lonely night. Enjoyrd. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice cadence and imagery.. an enjoyable read for its style... captured well the lonely feeling and the wistfull hope |
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