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a Dark morning
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a Dark morning |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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a Dark morning cawing sounds onset, against summer blue they land, ponderous, black heavyweights, feathered harbingers [of death] spearing tang open from green apples on young trees bending branches of limbs still thin enough that their tarsus wrap touching nail to nail the dwarf tree resembling a rookery, one soul miniature mockery of its cousins divebombing, his territory terrorized and conquered momentarily so I go to snapclap my hands, resembling buckshot sound advancing on the blackness they wing off only to perform highwire exploits, talking back all the while to the trespasser on two limbs who cannot fly snapclapping, echoes bouncing off doorways and back again, main and side streets empty as churchgoers still sleep, blankets gripped and pulled over tousled heads just black baggage of thievery and I they wing off but the miniatures stay behind, reclaiming, regrouping, swinging down on lighter fluff to bring their fledglings from the bushes to feed on fallen green apples |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
er, I don't want to be the first to say you're poetry going to the birds but, Sunshine, keep crow-clapping...it's excellent, descriptive writing  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh oh, the same with my berries overhere and fighting cats and barking farmdogs.... Good morning to you Sunshine Great, great poem you wrote Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh I love the imagery in this... VERY COOL write Sun...so POE perfect... ya know what they say... tis better to shoo crow than to eat it  and LOL@Balladeer...  We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Wonderfully expressive imagery ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Clapping her too Karilea ... only 'tis for you my dear ... much applause, loved this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy do I dislike those birds! I go out also and clap by hands and they just keep on doing what they were doing like I don't even exist, a poem I am sure lots can identify with that have apple and cherry trees! Great! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
The apple that Snow White did eat, would quickly all those birds defeat, but apples we would dare not touch for they we have we love so much. Great poem, keep up the good work. Rick |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I saw a bluejay yesterday intimidate a crow and chase him off right on his tail. They are everywhere and seem to naturally annoy us. Enjoyed. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Enjoyed this!!! Good Imagery and I like the underlying depth... |
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