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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunset again fades The crimson colors of day To sepia and grey… [You left today] Glorious colors Fill the sky's canvas With watercolor strokes [Nothing seems the same] Heat from the day Rises in wavering sheets Replaced by evening cool [I can only paint the image] Gloaming … Fall into dark soon… As night's influence grows On this landscape [The feelings have no color] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
... for feelings have bled along this day all the crimson has gone gray all the blue has lost sheen, hue and all that's left is very dark... all that's left is one heart, stark oops. You started it...not that it needed finishing, but your muse just strummed a note to mine... thank you for this! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
you are welcome... your verse is wonderful..and perhaps says what is left unsaid in mine... thank you |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
poignantly perfect |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks Interloper... appreciate the comment and youtaking time to read. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the picture you've painted feels like a memory from my heart........ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"[I can only paint the image] Gloaming … Fall into dark soon… As night's influence grows On this landscape [The feelings have no color]" Very interesting emotions playing through these lines...well done! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
perfectly poignantly powerful I'm powerless to say anything profound{er}  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ron, this took a couple of reads to begin to sink in, but I love the unique contrasts between the vivid and colorful portrayal of the sunset with the bleak and colorless void felt of abscence. Great title, too. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sea... thank you... a very nice reply indeed! Et.. many thanks for the read and the nice words! VAS... priceless Mark.. Thanks for taking the time to read... and to comment. It was a play on the idea of viewing the close of day and how it might be captured to reflect the personal loss suffered. I also hoped it would reflect how theinternal and the external are effected by each other in some ways... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This poem ignited a memory in my heart I had forgotten, and it too was a painting unfinished. I loved the title of your poem, and once again, first class, thank you. "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, you make me think that feelings have no color and I would argue with you that feelings/emotions are indeed colorful... or is that just an artist's poetic license to imagine so? Much food for thought, yet again... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I hope you find the colors of the rainbow again one day soon. Sad write. All writing comes |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Graceful strokes of imagery across a canvas of the heart. Very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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