Open Poetry #14 |
You’ll Not Be There |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
When Summer whispers gently in the breeze, across the land... And all around, her golden touch is seen... ‘Tis maybe then these eyes will see, this heart will understand... That the only time we’ll meet, is in my dreams... I’ll never see your face, reflecting on the waters still... Your laugh is but imagined in my mind... Reality has bathed me, in a ghostly Winter chill... Though Summer, all around, does naught but shine... She calls me back into her warmth, enticing though it be... With scenes of someday’s memories, in the air... But nothing stirs except the tears, that fall inside of me... They fall, because I know... You’ll not be there... You’ll not be there to share the days, I thought would be forever... You’ll not be there to touch, when shadows fall... In truth, I know it’s fantasy... As lovers, we were never... Though never is a long, long time, you’ll not be there, at all... The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Fantasy's man....a clever write...well done, Sis.... |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
"‘Tis maybe then these eyes will see, this heart will understand... That the only time we’ll meet, is in my dreams..." Dreams has a way of refreshing us or bringing more sorrow. Sad this one was, but did enjoy the writing. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, this is perfect. I think the flow is just right, and the words, so heartachingly sad. Luv ya Sandra |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh my..I truly love this...so lyrical but sad! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is beautiful just like you are! "This rose has seen red, I have been blue |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Sad, wistful, beautifully done...jwesley |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Lady in White... Ah yes....a fantasy man....usually untouchable....thanks sis!!! inot2B... Yes, and the melancholy dreams have a way of staying with us during waking hours...Thank you!! Sandra... I'm so glad you liked this, lil sis...it was an aching sort of thing to write...thanks!!! Poet deVine... Oh, it is good to see you! I do appreciate your reply... Thank you!!! Irish Rose... Oh, you are such a dear friend.....and I thank you for your sweet reply.....it put a smile into my day!!! jwesley... Hello, my friend...and it is always good to hear from you!! Thank you!!! The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Sunny You write such hauntingly wonderful verse. Great job as always - I love it. A |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know what you mean about the one's that won't be there...James |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Don't abandon hope. Good write. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
...Ariana... thank you, my friend, but life does hold many haunts for me, I'm afraid......the secret is to make new dreams to take their places!! ...James... There may be some that won't be there, but there are others who will!! Thank you, James!! ...RSWells... There is always hope, even if we are too stubborn at the time to realize it has never left us!! Thank you, RSW!!!! The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Sunnyone... I know this heartache... you've penned it very well! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... you've expressed this so tenderly Sunny ... a beautiful flow of sentiments, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SunnyOne~ So lovely you've written of the warmth that beckons us all ... 'When Summer whispers gently in the breeze, across the land... And all around, her golden touch is seen... ‘Tis maybe then these eyes will see, this heart will understand...' 'She calls me back into her warmth, enticing though it be...' Within the completeness of your verse ... hope rises effervescently. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi ya, Sunnyone - It has been too long. I sincerely hope you are well, and that your muse put you up to this. There is a sense of melancholy here that is very sad. I also hope it doesn't involve either Toerag of Balladeer - those two scoundrels cannot be trusted! I have told everybody this many times. Here's a hug. Incidently, your poem is well written. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Musically sad and beautiful! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I’ll never see your face, reflecting on the waters still... Your laugh is but imagined in my mind... Reality has bathed me, in a ghostly Winter chill... Though Summer, all around, does naught but shine...' Beautiful expression of these feelings, Sunny...I really like this... sp it was love that first drew me, |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Oops...forgot to hit the library button! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
...suthern... Oh, yes...a poet's heart is so aware of these feelings...the heartache gives us but another reason to write, does it not? Thank you, my dear friend!!! ...kit... it is always such a sheer pleasure to have you visit at my door!! Thank you, and I am glad that you did enjoy this little bit of melancholy today!! ...Marge... I may be a dreamer, but I do believe that there is always a shred of hope, even in the most hopeless of situations. I thank you very much.......always enjoy your replies!! ...LngJhnAg... Oh, thank you for the big hug, and don't worry...the 'scoundrels' were not involved this time!! I am not acquainted with Toerag, but Balladeer has always been a gentleman!! It is good to hear from you again......my muse is pleased......thank you, too!! ...ethome... Yes....there is a musical sadness to this that is a familiar tool of my muse......and I am glad to have you visit here, my friend!! ...snowpants... Thank you so much for adding this to your library.....I am quite honored, my friend!! (And glad that you liked this one, too!!) The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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