Open Poetry #14 |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
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In light I stand, peer in dark window's past, I cup my hands as visors, shade salute, time so patient, it's distant shadow cast and now emotions not so resolute. This bright day in stark clarity apprise the Love we Loved and longed so long ago, glazed panes reflect disparity and lies, through portholes tint no hint of afterglow. But truth as spectrum bursts through aperture, outshone the colored memory withdraws, gleam valid that enchanted past obscure, reach back and douse the flame of that lost cause. Twas I who carried torch for all these years, lit not the way ahead but clouded mind and slowed my passage through it's sea of tears, Romantically regretted till it blind. I cannot re-aquire time spent dark nor blame your unawareness of my plight, I will however pray there's yet a spark of hope that Love's light warms me through life's night. |
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Twas I who carried torch for all these years, lit not the way ahead but clouded mind and slowed my passage through it's sea of tears, Romantically regretted till it blind. I cannot re-aquire time spent dark nor blame your unawareness of my plight, I will however pray there's yet a spark of hope that Love's light warms me through life's night." wow, wow, wow!! I love this ![]() |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This likes me..... |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Twas I who carried torch for all these years, lit not the way ahead but clouded mind and slowed my passage through it's sea of tears, Romantically regretted till it blind." Oh my, this is just lovely RSWells ... splendid phrasing. You've captured such a beautiful mood of remembrance and hopefullness, very nicely written! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Richard, this is absoutely fantastic and your use of metaphors in this poem is superb! I think next to Flatlander's Lament, this may just be the second best poem you have ever written, and I congratulate you on an absolutely wonderous read. Thank you. "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful sir. You are fast becoming a romantic poet favorite here! ![]() |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Dropped in to read this again, and this time I think I want to mention that the mood that you set in this poem was fantastic. I can almost see the pensive look in his eyes. Nicely done. "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nice writing! I'm sure there's a chance that you can reignite the spark and find that solace that you seek....I enjoyed the read! |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Very well done. Thanks. Melton |
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