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Intravenous Ice cream eater
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Intravenous Ice cream eater |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Cocoa desert in warm breeze caress weeps its harvest as candied hearts melt, into the virgin tide. all summer's subside. My tongue trails on opiate twirls of sumptuous faith, Smitten lips spiralling you drenched in dairy due. One kiss anointing your mire brow, salvia dances from tongue to flesh, expounding waves of vanilla caressing foundling foreplay forthright frenzied frenzied frenzied…………… In my madness you are no more erased to a passing pleasure a sharpening wind and tempered summer. I stand replenished, your hollow shell held absently. This evidence taunts my sweet denial. Your burial is quick in pace, a bland meal forced, unlike the ravage of your murder. Teeth crushing an arid cone, an ideology confirmed with genocide. Chomp, in sinks the molars of morality then the incisors of intellect lastly the premolars of belated penance. The canines bare un-atoned for the kill. ================== Thanks to Ro for the inspiration. Bet you did not see something like this coming. "across the unfair divide where black will never meet white so read my token lips like they never exist" nicky wire [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
I don't believe I've ever read such a rendering of a cool, sweet treat taken in so very well.... until now, that is.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...what an intense demise of an ice cream cone!  Now you are giving ME ideas...lol! Okay...let's tag team 'em Brian... Loved this. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Never knew ice cream could be like this! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
OMG!  What a way of presenting this !I love it!  |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Hmmm...talk about seeing ice cream in a WHOLE new light now...excellent write, though! I enjoyed this a lot! sp  to be with you... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In my madness you are no more erased to a passing pleasure a sharpening wind and tempered summer. I stand replenished, your hollow shell held absently. This evidence taunts my sweet denial. Your burial is quick in pace, a bland meal forced, unlike the ravage of your murder. Teeth crushing an arid cone, an ideology confirmed with genocide. Chomp, in sinks the molars of morality then the incisors of intellect lastly the premolars of belated penance. The canines bare un-atoned for the kill. ==================== ONLY YOU could put this spin on eating ice cream, this is so cool.... you put the SCREAM in we all scream for ice cream the imagery in this is awesome... and the whole conception is so creative,clever and fresh...RAW.... Good Ole Ro...she always did inspire great things in you  very very cool my poetic prophet eve We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You forgot the dental floss! No, seriously, this was deep, Brian Kathleen Blake |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brian...Wow! I wish I wasn't lactose intolerent.  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
OMG...think I'll O.D. on icecream tonight...LOL. Missed you Brian |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~So you finally decided to show up around here again eh? COOL! This,...oh my, is something else. To take ice cream? and do what you've done to it,...it just so totally, YOU. Pleasure to read. *Peace B. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hey Brian...LOL no one can accuse you of being just VANILLA....thsi si so sweetly intense...54 flavors of you...love it |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
sounds almost as good as this chocolate slim fast i am drinking haa...im glad i came back online in time to read this one ha... ~Victoria~
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
hmmmm and just think..... there are 31 flavors of this sort of thing.... hehehe -Napalm I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"My tongue trails on opiate twirls of sumptuous faith, Smitten lips spiralling you drenched in dairy due. One kiss anointing your mire brow, salvia dances from tongue to flesh, expounding waves of vanilla caressing foundling foreplay forthright frenzied frenzied frenzied……………" What a lead up to the pleasure of such a sweet experience....very well written Brian....as usual! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Decaflame, thanks.... sweet is a word I am not used to hearing when someone talks about my poetry. serenity, thanks for your wonderful response. Cool just remember to bring some vanilla ice cream JLR, oh yes icecream is one of the major food groups don't you know. Temptress, thanks snowpants, thanks Jan, I even take eating icecream very seriously, I like my ice cream sprinkled with loads of metaphors. Kathleen, I live on the edge no dental floss. oh dear did I hear the "d" word (deep) guess I am what I am Martie, sorry to hear that you are allergic to cows. Ruth, enjoy that ice cream SF, I was just out in the wilderness for a while, they have no ice cream out there. .Thank you for your very kind words. Paula, I am 54 flavours wow, I never knew that lol thanks Victoria, well make sure that you treat yourself sometimes as well. almost as good as slim fast now I am offended. NCC, 31 flavours, call me a traditionist. vanilla is fine for me. ethome, just to clarify I am not dating the ice cream it is just such a treat to eat. YUm thanks for reading and replying. "you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
mmmmm ice-cream, love that cold delicious stuff....never tried it intravenous...though..... enjoyed this one very very much. Charisma |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Charisma, intravenous is the only way to eat ice cream thanks for your kind words."you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see" Whipping boy |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
welcome back, brian now this is very cool writing...an original subject matter notwithstanding...i like the change of tone within the poem itself...it starts whimiscal, then turns darker, more mysterious for me.... do stay here a while... kaile |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kaile, great to hear from you too THanks for your kind words. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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