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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I needed someone this cold night warm arms moist lips and desperation each yearning ache of aspiration match my own... become a part of something other than my heart. Lonely finds her recreation... reality of inspiration. Life... I wanted to embrace in embracing then beget Death... I wanted to forget regrets that I have never yet known YOU. The all of me that you own. The contrast makes me more alone. Yet even now, I curl to sleep... It's your embrace that sparks my dream. I love you. And I always will. Every hope a dream I spill-- All my tears in linseed hue-- My dream in monochrome of BLUE. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Awwwwwwwww... can't possibly crit this sad sad poem dear... hugs to you  K |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lonely finds her recreation... reality of inspiration. ========================== I wanted to forget regrets that I have never yet known YOU. The all of me that you own. The contrast makes me more alone. Yet even now, I curl to sleep... It's your embrace that sparks my dream. I love you. And I always will. Every hope a dream I spill-- All my tears in linseed hue-- My dream in monochrome of BLUE. ======================= anybody ever tell ya yer beautiful in blue... feeling every word of this ...living it too... hugs me twin  meI'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
True blue portrayal of a lonely heart. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I feel the ache in your words. My thoughts are with you my friend. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Need a hug ? ? You got it ! ! ! Hug ! Love ya'  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Some day I'll meet you in a dream and we'll have a talk. *L* |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Haunting Connie |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So lonely in this poem. Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
K--I love your critiques!!! Don't ever stop, and I think you should know that your phrase--"I dinna like it" is catching on around here. Of course nobody knew where it came from...but they like it, and it's sort of a hip saying now..lol...hugs you. JM...reality sucks. Love you...will try to write tomorrow. HUGS. RS--thanks...a lonely heart? I guess it showed. Thank you for reading.  PdV...no words can thank you for all of your understanding. Marge? Thanks m.o.m. You're number 1! Sy...okay, I'm going to bed, (er, couch) now, and my best guess is that it'll take about five hundred tosses and the same amount of turns and then after I flip through the channels a kzillion times, I just might sleep. Now...synchronize your R.E.M. and meet there! Thanks for all the smiles. You are a doll! Connie...thank you! Sandra...for all my advice to you...shame on me...I never learn either! love you all...stay well, and I hope to be reading more soon. Forgive my absences as it can't really be avoided right now. I miss you guys! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
huge hug Serene. Thanks for sharing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I wish I could say that I don't know this. . . but I do. . .*sigh* you know that I love every line of it. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I DINNA LIKE IT! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
hehehehehehehe love ya K K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
K? I DONNA LIKE IT EITHER....ROFLMAO...thank you luv!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
YOU GOT THE WRONG LETTER! GASP! I feel faint...I'm fading away...saaaaaaaaaaaaveeeeeee me... Splat K |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Dear God Celeste I hope you get him back to fill those lonely arms and get those full lips kissed because if you don't I'm going to have to send down and have a bulletin put up in Jackson Square.....I don't know whether he can handle that much attention....whew! It's hard work getting the right love into the right arms! "Yet even now, I curl to sleep... It's your embrace that sparks my dream. I love you. And I always will. Every hope a dream I spill-- All my tears in linseed hue-- My dream in monochrome of BLUE." I just can't take the pain of that stanza......I'll help! [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
K? shaking my head and laughing again...I actually think that you are more tormented by your critiques than I am! ROFL...take it easy, girl! Or dare I say? "Whoa?"  Gawd but I love ya! brian? Thank YOU for the huge hug, luv!  Sven...Thank you as well your excellency! Eric...it's a deal. You are hired! and besides, it gives me the opportunity to do this again:  Thanks guys...and of course, the lovely K! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well darn it all anyways, if you were here I would give you the biggest darn hugging you ever had in your life (shoot, hope this is just a poem, as you have such a lovely, lively face Serenity) ahhhh mauhhhhhhhhh "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
REALLY? THE BIGGEST DARN HUGGING I EVER HAD IN MY LIFE? Now, hmmm...THAT would be hard to top...all puns absolutely intended of course!!!! You are pure sweetness, Mysteria, I thank you, as always...such a luv!!!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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