Open Poetry #14 |
Dance of You |
1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Dance of You morning do not take him this time you’ve come too soon leaving me with echoes from the corners of the moon immersed in velvet darkness shimmering shadows dance upon smooth satin sand dreamers still romance arms with strength embrace me gliding timed steps till dawn dissolves music when morning comes evaporating dance floor withdrawn sun light is much too stark star lit dances stop much too quick our waxen moon soon melts from torch of sun’s wick yet, I shall wait for you again counting petals in garden twilight engulfing in the dance of you my midnight highlight "...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Dance...and be free. Beautiful! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
truly beautiful! |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
yet, I shall wait for you again counting petals in garden twilight Very Beautiful |
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gw-gal New Member
since 2001-06-23
Posts 2 |
I'd love to have a dance like this, before the clock says it's 8 o-clock. very nice 1slick_lady =) |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Very nice I must say, great imagery. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Helen, I really liked this a lot. I believe it's some of the best of your writing that I've read. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...a lovely imagery... "...don't ever stop loving, don't ever stop believing, don't ever stop dreaming your dreams..." |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
helen, the flow of this is absolutly amazing. . . you've really found it with this one. . . I feel like dancing now!!! ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I like this very much wonderful imagery and emotion, it walks the line between sadness and joy very well. Thank you for sharing. Regards, Olias. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
morning do not take him this time you've come to soon leaving me with echoes from the conors of the moon ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love It!! Thanks Connie |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
What a way to end and start a day |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
I loved this very much |
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