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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2001-05-23 11:30 AM

I was a girl in skin, spotted.
Papered words, just litter, and truth.
Simply me on fiber, in pieces the same.
Stretching thoughts from tangles,
spreading sorrow and anger and love.

I was standing on tiptoes, then crashing.
Grabbing hold of purple - too late.
Setting brushes on canvas for resting.
And stories to hell for their wear.
I was a bad poet girl - who fell.
I was soiling screens and keypads,
I was strangling the reality for all to see.

I am paper. And you are hands - tired.
Words across, and guilt for them.
I am paying. For truth.
For the fear of you never understanding.
They were only letters - formed.
Only secrets exposed? What coarse actions!
What very broken ways, to be.

I was off balance, in an action scene.
I was digits on display.
My words, your truth unheard.
The sin surrounding sunlight - the ache.
And a bad poet girl - who fell.
Who drowned in what was left to her.
Who torched the silence with word.
And for that,...I am sorry.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-05-23 11:40 AM

Stretching thought from tangles...Wow! Every line held my complete attention.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-23 12:28 PM

Papered words, just litter, and truth.
Simply me on fiber, in pieces the same.
Stretching thoughts from tangles,
spreading sorrow and anger and love.

I was standing on tiptoes, then crashing.
Grabbing hold of purple - too late.
Setting brushes on canvas for resting.
And stories to hell for their wear.
I was a bad poet girl - who fell.
I was soiling screens and keypads,
I was strangling the reality for all to see.

I am paper. And you are hands - tired.
Words across, and guilt for them.
I am paying. For truth.
For the fear of you never understanding.
They were only letters - formed.
Only secrets exposed? What coarse actions!
What very broken ways, to be.

I was off balance, in an action scene.
I was digits on display.
My words, your truth unheard.
The sin surrounding sunlight - the ache.
And a bad poet girl - who fell.
Who drowned in what was left to her.
Who torched the silence with word.
And for that,...I am sorry.
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A... NEVER apologize for your poetry...
regardless of who cant understand its reasons or meanings...
or those who dont want to read the truth of your pain....
Your words, your expressions...your release of emotion ...you NEED to write to heal..
never apologize for them...
but I understand the point you are trying to make here...and I think I know where this is coming from...
and obvioulsy this poem effected me and that is yet more proof of the gift of your writing...
and this is a powerful and intense piece of work...and I'll hush now and go read it again..
for there is much to see here...
Your an amazing poet A and no one can take that from you.

jm

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2001-05-23 12:33 PM

You know, Truth always exacts a price but in the end, it's always one worth paying. I have to echo the previous WOW. This is excellent. The emotion cariies well throughout the entire piece. Beautifully written piece.

Michael

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

4 posted 2001-05-23 01:07 PM

Oh, never be sorry....not for sharing such thoughts as these with such family as us!!
Loved it, SF.....

Live...Love...Be grateful for both!!

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

5 posted 2001-05-23 01:25 PM

I have apologized for much in my life, but never again will I apologize for my poetry...don't you either!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

6 posted 2001-05-23 03:40 PM

I have to echo everyone's thoughts here NEVER APOLOGISE for your poetry. It is your art form and it is something that you are very talented at, be proud of your pen and your words. And take a standing ovation for this one oh "wonderous poetry girl".

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2001-05-23 04:32 PM

You always, blow me away miss a--and I only object to your use of two words...bad and poet should never appear in the same line of a poem of yours...

How I envy your talent!

PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

8 posted 2001-05-23 04:56 PM

This blew me away. You are very talented.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

9 posted 2001-05-23 05:20 PM

Am I wrong? It doesn't seem like you're apologizing for your poetry. You could be. I'd like to say what I thought I got out of this, but it annoys writers sometimes to be read in the wrong way.

Well...at any rate, this is certainly a very well done and well expressed poem. I enjoyed it.

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

10 posted 2001-05-23 05:29 PM

WOW, I wish I had your talent.
How can you say sorry if what you write is what you feel? No one should ever say sorry after writing such beautiful peace.

Titia

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2001-05-23 05:46 PM

Just keep writing....

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

12 posted 2001-05-23 06:25 PM

SF...You, my dear friend, have nothing to apologize for to anyone. Remember that. You never cease to amaze me with the depth of your writing. I hope all is well. Talk soon, ok? Take care.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

13 posted 2001-05-23 07:59 PM

funny, I don't feel that you're apologizing for your poetry either. . .

I feel that you're taking a stand and that if anyone doesn't like it. . . too bad for them. . . you will write what you will write and that's that. . .

this is superb SpitFire. . .it's a fine example of free verse. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

14 posted 2001-05-24 09:46 AM

A most excellent poet girl me thinks! Take care, and keep writing!

"Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our
feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly." ~unknown

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

15 posted 2001-05-24 11:25 AM

enjoyed

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

16 posted 2001-05-24 03:52 PM

Fantastic work, SpitFire.

I hear you, too. It's okay. A learning experience, as we reign our world back in
to where we can control it. And if the words
this person you trusted were betrayed, then shame on him or her.

Peace.

Corinne

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