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Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

0 posted 2001-06-19 02:44 PM

Feel the heat in breezes strong
as winds corrupt, forever's long
dwell in clearness, window of pain
rumour myself in lies stretched again
heart remembers the lonely of times
embraces each parting in mirror of rhymes
reflections, reversed on glass often shines
but smudged to eyes, on this day are the lines
words of endearment, of loving caress
tenderness written, delivered express
embedded in thoughts the shades of my blue
mirrored between all these lines reading you.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-06-19 02:45 PM

This is very, very good. You are a welcome addition to Passions!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-06-19 05:15 PM

enjoyed... nice rhyme and flow..

glad you decided to join us here in wonderland...

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-06-19 05:37 PM

oooooo.....I like this very very much.....fantastic!!

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

4 posted 2001-06-20 05:43 AM

Decaflame, Cpat Hair, SEA
once again thank you for
your kind words of encouragement.

~A~

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

5 posted 2001-06-20 11:37 AM

Embraces each parting in mirror of rhymes...loneliness chosen is perhaps the loneliest. Enjoyed.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-06-20 11:42 AM

"mirrored between all these lines reading you."

That's quite the line I read a lot into all of it....good work!

Lady Ollyne
Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 337
East Coast

7 posted 2001-06-21 04:34 AM

Alice

The loneliness
of your posting
comes through.

Lady O

[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (edited 06-21-2001).]

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2001-06-21 06:01 AM

Wonderful phrasing Alicethruglass ... many thoughts to ponder in this lovely piece, very much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 2001-06-21 07:22 AM

Great last line...

I really enjoyed this piece.
Michael

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