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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-06-19 05:41 AM

Waltz with me?
just once again...
dizzy dancing
lover's spin
icy fog beneath our feet
and mask on face
with false lips meet.

Waltz with me...
in conjured bliss
take my hand
take all you've missed
the night is yours--
this is our tryst
take tonight and raise a fist.

To all the dreams
that could have been
be damned the schemes
that cried, "just friends"
I want to kick my shoes away
and dance with you anew each day.

Oh take my hand, I curtsey low...
waltz with me, just dance real slow
a velvet glove to velvet lips
fingered touch on satin hip...
waltz with me, I hunger--moan.
I nibble silence of alone.

Even now, I quarter-step
in shadows of my memories kept.
ballerina in a box..
the music chimes in spite of locks.

A velvet prison trapping me,
take my hand and set me free,
from this mirror mocking me--
Oh waltz with me. Just waltz with me.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-19-2001).]

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

1 posted 2001-06-19 07:27 AM

This waltz contains no shmaltz. Here's to two hips thrashing in dim light as two ships passing in the night.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-06-19 08:32 AM

I nibble silence of alone.

A line I will remember.... enjoyed this a great deal!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-06-19 08:39 AM

Serenity,
Well done enjoyed the read. Sy

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2001-06-19 08:55 AM

WOW!
Love this.

Maree

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2001-06-19 09:27 AM

I can't pick a favorite line......
I love every word.......
SO, I'll just keep this

it's perfect!!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-06-19 10:03 AM

Oh take my hand, I curtsey low...
waltz with me, just dance real slow
a velvet glove to velvet lips
fingered touch on satin hip...
waltz with me, I hunger--moan.
I nibble silence of alone.
Even now, I quarter-step
in shadows of my memories kept.
ballerina in a box..
the music chimes in spite of locks.
A velvet prison trapping me,
take my hand and set me free,
from this mirror mocking me--
Oh waltz with me. Just waltz with me.
===========================

you always were at your best when your dancing...
be it in rhyme or quarter time.

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Tara Simms
Senior Member

since 1999-08-12

Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

7 posted 2001-06-19 10:32 AM

This is a wonderful read! Brings to mind memories of a masquerade ball from long ago. I loved the rhyme scheme; it helped the flow of your words. The wistful longing came through loud and clear.

Take me as I am or watch me as I go

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

8 posted 2001-06-19 12:02 PM

This is incredible...

you never fail to leave a wonderful impression upon this reader's mind...

many thanks for your poetry...

Regards, O Serene one,
Sudhir

"I was born intelligent - education ruined me"

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2001-06-19 03:08 PM

Superb, you have done something beautiful once again.
You know, I once had a man who could waltz like a dream, of course he was not any good, otherwise, broke my heart, he did.
But I still think of those wonderful dances. Nothing like a man who can dance well. I know this was not about the dance per se, but it just made me think like that. I love reading your poems.

Sandra

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2001-06-19 03:15 PM

I will waltz with you
rise and fall through life's journey
chasseing with you

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2001-06-19 03:21 PM

Ditto CPhat, "nibble silence of alone" a fantastic line, and this is a poem I will read again, great job.

~*~ Tell someone you love them today, as tomorrow may never come ~*~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2001-06-20 03:26 PM

RS--well, I was feeling a little more romantic than just thrashing--grin--but I've been known to thrash too! lol..thank you!

CH...yanno? I have no idea where that came from...was a happy surprise for me too. Thank you!

Sy...makes me happy to make you happy. Thank you, m'friend!!!!

Maree...yer beautiful, yanno that? thank you!

SEA...my gratitude as always for reading!

JM? When are WE going dancing? HUH????
I can still do the rumba, baby! lol...love you!

sudhir...I know your time is limited, so I truly appreciate your taking the time to read me! You're fab!

Sandra...yes, the romance'll get ya everytime. But truly, Reality sucks!

Tara...glad you caught the reference...I have this thing about going to carnival in venice, Italy...that's sort of what I was dreaming about..THANKS!

Interloper..sweet reply...I thank you!

Mysteria, thank you as well...I will try to catch up on your work, but unfortunately my pc is not cooperating with your wonderful graphis of late! sigh and mutter...but thanks!

and special thanks to Sharon, once again for the inspiration!

Love to all and thanks again!

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