Open Poetry #14 |
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Elixir |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa ![]() |
Elixir The nearness of your opiates scent Infused addictions sweet melancholy, My fortress'd heart entombed in loves lament Besieged by obsessions fate and folly, You fill my veins, I am the air you breathe We are the vessel for our deep desire To you my life, my mortal soul bequeath No quenching for our eternal fire. I dreamed a nightmare draught of life alone A life where you and I do not exist Separate lives lived in different worlds Never to hold you close or feel your kiss, In waking listened to my aching soul Discover, without you I am not whole. Olias. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Fantastic, brilliant poem, very full of long words, which is cool, I had to read it a few times to get the whole gist of it, once I had, I instantly could associate with what your saying, many thanks . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The intensity of love as addiction...a rush like no other. You've penned it well! |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The nearness of your opiates scent Infused addictions sweet melancholy, My fortress'd heart entombed in loves lament Besieged by obsessions fate and folly, those lines say so much..... enjoyed the read!!!! |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
In waking listened to my aching soul ============= Well crafted. Enjoyed the read. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Angelswing, Thank you for your response, I'm glad you liked. JLR, Thanks for stopping by and replying, your words me alot. Cpat Hair, Thanks for you comments, I'm so you glad you liked this. Interloper, Thank you for replying, I am happy you enjoyed this piece. I'm sorry everyone that its taken me a while to reply I hope you understand. Regards to everyone and Thank you again. Olias. |
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