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Brian the stripper
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Brian the stripper |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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In the ties of conquest One word of bliss, stray whispering lips for a love-left list. Through cranks and cracks the big bone makes its scene lumbering in little shacks. Brian the stripper Crawling naked up the walls Place a dollar where you last left God. Don't need an alibi to taste the dance or thread hairline trance. Analgesic infants defy A cradle credence unbroken hard labour for powdered saviour, Mortuary poetry is last words spoken. Brian the stripper He is a coming Through the door Brian the stripper, Not him you see naked, The real ones gone a hiding Brian the stripper Wears a garter, Pay him on the way out. Exact change, got no time to barter. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-11-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Brian...my humble offering---$$$$!  (and I thought of a name for that cart invention---"The Pony Express!!  )but seriously as always you take a subject most think irreverent and add that maddening depth to it: "Crawling naked up the walls Place a dollar where you last left God." Smiling here, lovie!  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
LOL!!! some great lines in here!!! what a fine poet you are, my friend....... come closer... i have a five dollar bill in my teeth |
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theLadypoet Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 97Or USA |
 Brian, dear heart, tis a lovely wee poem, unil you dig down into the nether depths. Little by little it works its way into your mind and blossoms with meanings and walks down some very serious paths. I am much to shy to offer you dollars to see your torso... ya got change for a twenty? "A woman is like a tea bag, you never know how strong she is until she gets in hot water..." Eleanor Rooevelt |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Brain, Some wonderful lines. Enjoyed the read. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Like I said matey it's weird heh. Love-left list? I will nag you on that one... 'Don't need an alibi to taste the dance or thread hairline trance. Analgesic infants defy' Nice, nice... Overall...this is good..weird, but good...weird is often good - as long as you connect with a reader, and I think you can here...  K |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
At least a $10.00 bill for this one!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All I can think of when reading this is that hilarioius poem Poet Femme did last year with you in the French Maids costume and.... ERRRRRR I mean.... hahahaha ...oh nevermind...no one will believe it anyway Sometimes I dont have a clue what your intention is...but even then... your wit, clever sarcasim and unique vision always intrigues and makes me think. and talk about imagery ~woohoo~ hahaha laterChippendale-gator Eve |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian...Very interesting, and layered..and like Janet..do I understand it?...hmmm...does it matter? Enjoyed! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Brian the what? No sa! Hm. Wow. After reading and rereading and realizing how your pieces are always like those blocks that open up and there's another a bit smaller inside and another inside that one and so on. You know? There are things to uncover each time you read. And now I'm really, really afraid to du-ET with you ya see, for I'm not sure I can go where it is you go. It's pretty cool you know, what you do. *Peace B. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
My, my....'tis a whole new side of you I now see!!  All writing comes |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my....oh my.....never seen a stripper before....and I was way back in the corner, so couldn't see anything.....is there any change you do that once again. *lol* like it very much. Charisma |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Brian...... "Brian the stripper Crawling naked up the walls Place a dollar where you last left God." oh Lordy hehe enjoyed the read, Thank you Maree  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
MMMMMMMMm interesting picture of you here Brian....heheheh...nice |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Brian I love the different roads each individual poem you write goes down. "Place a dollar where you last left God." Man you got to do that before you get to the mortuary poetry....those final lines.......great poem Brian! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
i have to say i enjoyed the whole poem but those lines that every one else here has been quoting are certainly powerful,well done  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Brian, these lines are SO clever and leave the mind wide open for interpretation...the last stanza does it for me...well done! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serene. first of all I think you need to rename the cart "stallion express" And thank you for your donation, unbuttoning my shirt half way. for your reply.doreen, you know the way to my heart,, hard currency lol. YOu got me blushing with your reply thank you. Ladypoet, change??? There are no pockets in my little costume. LOL. THank you for your very kind words. they mean alot to me. Seymour, thank you. K, as always your observations are a blessing. Beware or I might kidnap you and force you to be my editor. Yes weird can be good. Thank you. Kathleen, am I going to be sold for a $10? I thought I was worth at least $20 EVE, try and control yourself or we will both get barred from here. You will never let that french maid incident die, will you? Thanks for your comments. Martie, when you make sense of this please tell me because I am just as clueless. thank you for your reply. Alicia, like russian dolls. WOW well I am seriously blushing at your extremely kind words. Don't worry I know some interesting paths, and I just worried that I wouldn't be able keep up with you once we start our poetic journey. LW, I always like to expose.. bad word choice.. explore new sides of me Charisma, there is a 5pm showing and another one at 10pm. thanks for your reply. Maree, OH lordy indeed, well got a make a living some how. Thanks for your reply. Paula, thanks. Interesting is a good word. Ethome, I can't remember where I last left god and I am not ready to sign off this mortal coil just yet, Thank you sir for your very kind words. Watersign6, thank you. Michael, you know me just trying to fake intelligence by talking nonsense. Well the garter thing is more of a private hobby. lol. Thanks for reading and reply. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
mmm 5pm....and 10pm....will that be your time or my time. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Quite the interesting write, brian...I didn't fully understand it, but was entertained nonetheless! sp  I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Charisma, My time I guess. Sp, thank you for your comments. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Encore!!! This is fluidity... in essence... regards to you Brian, my friend, Sudhir |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Don't need an alibi to taste the dance or thread hairline trance. Analgesic infants defy A cradle credence unbroken hard labour for powdered saviour, Mortuary poetry is last words spoken. You've done it again full on sensory attack, and yes I like very much wizard of words. Thanks for the magic. Regards, Olias. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sudhir, my stripping days are over. Thank you for your very kind words. Olias, thank you. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Brian, your stripping days may be over but I've stripped this poem to the bone and I am still coming up with new layers of nuance...there is no end to you...and that is a good thing. Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kethry, thank you for your very generous reply. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, though this poem has much behind it, I say "Take it off-take it all off" Sandra |
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