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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-06-13 12:43 PM

Turn the bed down low
as if I were a one-night guest..
Pull the blanket slow
revealing sheets and your best guess
Undrape the pillows for our heads
whisper reassuring dread
finding pinpoint in my eyes
darkness without compromise
Turn the bed down pull it slow--
lonely me.
nowhere to go...

© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

1 posted 2001-06-13 12:45 PM

you been gettin my undivided attention o yuh

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2001-06-13 12:57 PM

Short and sweet dearie...it's lovely...lonely...

hugs

K

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

3 posted 2001-06-13 01:46 AM

Well...where you are doesn't sound that bad. Really liked this!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2001-06-13 08:02 AM

Hon, if I was in your town, I'd help you paint it RED.

Sad but lovely.

Maree

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-06-13 08:09 AM

awwwwwww...perk up, you..and Happy Birthday

, dear one...((hugs))

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Cpat Hair

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Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-06-13 08:17 AM

Very nice use of images and flow to set the mood and convey the feeling... enjoyed this a great deal!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-06-13 07:48 PM

melancholy. . . yes. . . that's the word I'd use here. . .

excellent. . .

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