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Open Poetry #14

- Wilted Heart Tanka -

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2001-06-10 02:47 PM

Wilted Heart Tanka

At calm of mourning
wake not this rose of my heart
it dreams of love's beat
embracing thorns and petals
wilting in yesterday lost

By Melissa Honeybee

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-06-10 02:55 PM

Melissa~
My gosh ... how beautiful is this ????
Just tooooooooo !
WOW ! What a lovely sight to see !
You da' Tanka-Bomb-Baby !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

2 posted 2001-06-10 02:56 PM

beautiful tanka
showing rosepetals and thorns
protecting sweet dreams
floating upon lover's beat
don't awake rose for mourning
~*~

you penned a great Tanka ....like it a lot.

Charisma

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

3 posted 2001-06-10 02:58 PM

Melissa, this is a wonderful Tanka and a wonderful presentation. I must try this form someday.

Parker

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2001-06-10 02:59 PM

A beautiful metaphorical poem linking a past love to the qualities of the rose!

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2001-06-10 03:02 PM

it has been a while since i read your tankas and i must say that it has been WAY too long...

keep up the good work here!

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

6 posted 2001-06-10 03:06 PM

I love the way you do Tanka.. beautifully penned.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

7 posted 2001-06-10 06:34 PM

Thank you for reading everyone!

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2001-06-10 11:03 PM

Beautifully done Melissa..

~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

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