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Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

0 posted 2001-06-08 02:52 AM

To one called Rain, by whatever name
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Rain in the Mists

Poignant eyes unseeingly stare
Across the sea to horizons lair
The lair of the mists eternally rising
Shimmering smoke always hiding.
Hiding from sight what is within
Past lives, past loves, where to begin.

A gentle smile lifts chiseled lips,
At thought of the magic of the mist.
Mists which curled and swirled around,
Until a shape appeared to be found.
More than once they had attained
To bring the one he had called Rain.

One carried forward from eternal past,
ever to appear, but not to last.
Their souls to be, to love once more,
Only to slip in the mists opening door.
One day to awake and find her gone,
Her side of bed, cold and forlorn.

Rain was her name with sunshine eyes
From misty isles where mystery lies.
So on sails the ship, forever to be,
dragonhead peering out to sea.
Chasing the mists, wherever found
Til his arms again would be around.

The image in his mind to ever see,
A smile on her face, only for he.
Laughter like sleigh bells softly played,
Only caressed a love in fine array.
Search he would forevermore,
Rain to be waiting at misty door.

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2001-06-08 03:48 AM

ahh, Sweet One. You know I love this!

Did I mention that you keep getting better and better?

You know my favorite line is this:

"A gentle smile lifts chiseled lips,"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-06-08 07:41 AM

nicely done..gentle flow to a romantic tale

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-06-08 07:45 AM

Great writing here Logan!
               "Rain was her name with sunshine eyes
                From misty isles where mystery lies.
                So on sails the ship, forever to be,
                dragonhead peering out to sea.
                Chasing the mists, wherever found
                Til his arms again would be around."

Love that verse!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2001-06-09 03:35 PM

Logan~
The dimensions in this piece are stunning~

'Rain was her name with sunshine eyes'

I'll bet there was a rainbow there !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Tovi
Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 168

5 posted 2001-06-09 04:29 PM

This is just beautiful! Magical and mystical.

Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2001-06-09 04:38 PM

"The image in his mind to ever see,
A smile on her face, only for he.
Laughter like sleigh bells softly played,
Only caressed a love in fine array.
Search he would forevermore,
Rain to be waiting at misty door."

BRAVO!!! Wow, this poem just blew me away to the marvelous voice and visions cleared through the soft mist of your thoughts! (sigh) Yes, Rain will indeed rain to her door, but it will imeediately be followed with a rainbow, a smile of colors that will color her heart and forever set her to dance in his arms. (smiles) The search shall be complete for her very soon! (smiles) Wonderful vision, I loved being loosened in your gorgeous visions! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2001-06-09 04:55 PM

Logan, this gave me chills, it is so vivid and soul stirring. Greatly enjoyed, thanks!
Sandra

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2001-06-09 06:48 PM

This is my favorite of yours. Very nice imagery, Logan. It seemed so real. Like watching it happen in a movie before me. Great work!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

9 posted 2001-06-10 07:00 PM

I believe I remember this one, Logan, dear.
A very mysterious and comforting piece.

So great to have you here with us.

Cor

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

10 posted 2001-06-10 11:04 PM

Ahh, Temptress, gentle one, you always do me such kindness that you humble me with your words..Thank you for you...gentle smile

Cpat Hair, thank you for your kind words and for reading...gentle smile

ethome,I am glad you liked that verse, as it is my favorite also,,thank you for being here...gentle smile

Ahh, Marge, gentle one, I bet there was a rainbow also. Thank you for reading...gentle smile

Tovi, gentle smile, it is always so nice to hear your words and thoughts. Thank you for reading

Noah, you are always so sweet with your words and the way you put them together. You always make me feel more than I am, thank you...gentle smile

Sandra, I am happy that you enjoyed this, as I am very pleased you read and commented on it. It is always nice seeing your name appear...gentle smile

LoneWolf, Thank you for your kindness and choosing this one as a favorite of mine, as I always have enjoyed this also. Thank you for reading and commenting on it

Ahhh, hugs, Cor, hon, so good seeing you back, yes, the name is familiar and maybe half a dozen words, the rest I completely overhauled for here, but sweet of you to remember. Thank you for being here, as you are very dear to me...gentle smile

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