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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-06-08 06:24 AM

Illusions of You

A fine line I walk,
teetering on the edge,
memories scraping the softness
of external thoughts.

A fine line I write,
words clinging to either side
and in between, time being
my deadline.

Full Moon of morning,
pressing these thoughts wearing thin,
spilling over
onto pages of blue.

Reality charms, yet dreams
are withering on sidelines,
unrealized,
to be left echoing in chambers;
lingering left-overs,
tabled before you.

Hungering for truth,
tormented by love,
the mind corners, bending,
lines intersecting, piercing,
dividing a heart,
once coated by velvet words,
peeling back
exposing a journey's end.

No looking back, as season's change
fading into illusions of you.
Edges unclear, lost between lines
the hourglass tilts
and for just a moment,
time stands still.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2001-06-08 06:31 AM

It's no journey's end for you sweetheart when you can write like this.......

                "Hungering for truth,
                 tormented by love,
                 the mind corners, bending,
                 lines intersecting, piercing,
                 dividing a heart,
                 once coated by velvet words,
                 peeling back
                 exposing a journey's end.

                 No looking back, as season's change
                 fading into illusions of you.
                 Edges unclear, lost between lines
                 the hourglass tilts
                 and for just a moment,
                 time stands still."

Time stands still until you write another poem from the heart and then it becomes alive again with your creative juices flowing....It may not be the total answer but it's the greatest outlet a talented person like yourself can ever have....the rest will fall into place!!      Have a nice day!!

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

2 posted 2001-06-08 07:29 AM

Enjoyed it very much!

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

3 posted 2001-06-08 07:50 AM

WOWZA! great poem,

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2001-06-08 08:02 AM

very interesting work...enjoyed the language and images as well as rthe flow... look forward to reading more

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

5 posted 2001-06-08 08:07 AM

*wow* enjoyed this fabulous write very much.....well done.

((hugs))
Charisma

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

6 posted 2001-06-08 09:53 AM

oh my, this was just breathtaking.
loved every single line but this part
right here is what captured me.

"the hourglass tilts
and for just a moment,
time stands still."

just awesome! loved this

take care.
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2001-06-08 11:06 AM

E...you are like a one man cheerleading squad...thank you ~Softsmiles~
M

Walker, Watersign..thank you both *s

Cpat Hair..thankyou, there aremany there if you care to read, not sure how many more I will be posting...and not all are that interesting

Charisma

huggs back, glad you enjoyed.

amy..I guess I wish that line to be true...thank you

~Wynter/M

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-06-08 08:19 PM

Maureen, there have been many times this year that I wish time would, indeed stand still. Be well...

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

9 posted 2001-06-09 05:26 AM

Kathleen, it always stands still at the wrong moments for me...thank you

Maureen

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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