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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Eye-Dropped ever hear with your eyes? or see with your touch? or feel with your sense of smell? they did all that, one to the other, while I eye-dropped them yes, the word should be “eavesdrop” but they said not a word or I would have heard, so I could only see all that was left unsaid quite by accident for she only saw him he only saw her she had turned a corner he held his post, standing, watched her approach under his gaze, her stride became more purposeful his stanch became more virtuous but his eyes gave her away and her eyes gave him stay the distance, abridged the electric, sparked the greeting became a quantum theory their light blinded only me as I eye-dropped on what God had put together she raised her hand touched his arm then all became right in their world I would have eavesdropped to hear what transpires between a perfect union of touch but I was already blinded by an absolute and I beheld green knew envy’s twine, when envy left I realized the sound of chime so then, in this world, there does reside a place where hope breathes and love encircles someday, I would want a reason for someone to eye-drop me. write with grace, all others lose face; |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
And watching with more than eyes I saw those thing which I held in awe... Very nicely done... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
A quantum leap in your work. Astronomical! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
hope breathes and love encircles someday, I would want a reason for someone to eye-drop me. .... WOW... WOW... WOW I think I love the concept of eye-dropping... Regards O Lady in White, Sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"but his eyes gave her away and her eyes gave him stay" Wonderfully creative concepts you've woven into this Lady In White, beautiful phrasing, much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Cpat....thank you.....those lines work for me, too.... Interloper...quantum? thank you.... Sudhir, I enjoy the concept as well...it is very quietly done..... Kit, sometimes creativity is hard to come by, and we need to know when to grasp it... thank you! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LadyInWhite~ Oh, my ! How perfectly creative and admirable. Favorite list for sure ! ! For me to pick any line to quote as a favorite would be impossible - Sooooooooo, I'll just keep the whole thing ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
What a read this was! As an artist, I must feel with my eyes and see with my hands when I sculpt. Does that count? I loved every word of this and thank you for sharing it with us.Michael Proust- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This was so well done!! Very clever!! All writing comes |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Lovely style!!! Bridgette |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sometimes ... there is one that gets away from us ... This should not be one of them~ *Top floor, please !  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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