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Open Poetry #13

whispers of love

DreamLess
Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 92

0 posted 2001-04-05 04:07 AM

between the whispers of yesterday and tommorow
the love showed today in my life
longings hokked me to your love
and you became the light in my eyes and my soul
crystal feeling with wings of whispers
passed on my heart and left it full of love
I scratched the letters of love in my soul
and made the lines full of perfumed feelings
then i wrote this poem to let you smell this words

WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2001-04-05 05:28 AM

amateurs grow to be fine poets and you are

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-04-05 11:15 AM

Only 17. Well done.
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crystal feeling with wings of whispers
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The above line reminds me of a Bumblebee ... incapable of light, yet it flies. And so does your poem.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-04-05 11:17 AM

Nice writing. You just get better and better!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

4 posted 2001-04-05 03:57 PM

"I scratched the letters of love in my soul"

awesome line and nice poem

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-04-09 07:57 PM

this is well done. . . I love the images that you've used here. . . especially the one about "smelling the words". . .

you're getting better DreamLess. . .

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