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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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words drip d r i p d r i p from hidden wells of the poet's mind blooming like winter buds finally do tied sagging down to the busyness of nothingness in daily life he turns off his muse exasperatingly hoping he isn't endowed with such a gift?need?want? a c u r s e |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kaile~ This is surely not the work of a curse ! Your muse is BUSY !  Wonderfully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I liked this. Feels that way sometimes, doesn't it? My compliments, Faterider. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's only a curse when it: becomes insomnia interrupts how one gets paid puts off housework puts off laundry puts off dinner, lunch or breakfast is apparently incurable and when you know you have a place to put your words, and you are accepted by all.... LOL |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you for reading, marge, just a woman and sunshine...life has been gruelling and i hope to devote more time to writing soon...thoughts are lost daily because of such inability to grab a pen and sit down to write...sigh...  sunshine, yup, passions means the world to me  |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Now this is unique, and very cool. I definitely understand these lines... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
kaile, you know that I love this one. . . I love the way that you made the words "drip" on the page like they do from our minds and our pens. . . excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
PoeticKnight....it feels nice when a new favourite poet comes by and compliments on your work...wink Sven..thank you...i personally like the drip lines best of all...thank you also for always making time to read my work.... thankx |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hey! look what i found! i love this one kaile..love the way its written! and i think many of us can identify!! having a baby around now, keeps many of my own thoughts far from pen and paper, until often they become lost..but...*sigh*..one day maybe i'll take up recording my abstract thoughts as they arrive...lol best of luck to you and your "curse"...(  i often call it that meself..!!)hugs, g where am i...WHOA! and what am i doing in this handbasket!?! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
kaile, It's always frustrating when you get a good line in your head and have no time or pen to write it down!! Seems to get lost into forever then. I hope you find more time real soon! LW All writing comes |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey! I didn't know you were kaile...no one told me ~sniff sniff~ and I love your poetry... this is no exception - it's great!  K |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Kai, This is wonderful!!! Nice concrete piece. I really like concrete poems and have done quite a few myself. Was wondering if you would consider tying the word sagging like below to add to the impact of your piece and making it a more powerful concret poem? I only hope this software will let me show what I mean... s a g g i n g Panne |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
well- it almost let me...lol. But you get the idea. Panne |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
good write i enjoyed it |
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