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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-04-02 01:10 PM

I Always Thought
Virginia Salter

You know,
I always thought
when we passed through summer,
into the fall of our lives
and then winter,
when love lay quietly dormant,
almost secret,
that we would still make it through
those cold, cloudy, icy days
and would find our spring
on the other side.
That’s what I thought
when I said,
“I do” to you
and them
and God.

Yet
spring still comes
year after year
not our spring
but theirs
yours
and mine.
Flowers still bloom
babies still become
life goes on,
and I
can still rejoice
in the blossoms of life
and living.

© April 2, 2001

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-04-02 01:50 PM

when love lay quietly dormant,
almost secret,
that we would still make it through
those cold, cloudy, icy days
and would find our spring
on the other side.
That’s what I thought
when I said,
“I do” to you
and them
and God.

Yet
spring still comes
year after year
not our spring
but theirs
yours
and mine.
======================

Virginia, this is such a soft spoken lovely poem.
I love the employ and analogies of the seasons.
A tender bittersweet piece with your gift of imagery evident.
well done poetess

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-04-02 02:26 PM

Thank you, Janet Marie, your words are a balm as spring.

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

3 posted 2001-04-02 07:43 PM

Your imagery is wonderful. A great job indeed.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2001-04-02 07:55 PM

I loved this. Always like seeing the passing years tightly held and loved. And you put it so well. I really like the way you put it together. Wrote one a few years back along the same lines, but not as well put as yours. I called it Casual Love.

Thanks for sharing this.

jwesley

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

5 posted 2001-04-04 08:04 PM

love nature poetry!!!!!!

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

6 posted 2001-04-05 02:32 AM

The seasons offer a compelling rhythm.

DreamLess
Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 92

7 posted 2001-04-05 03:14 AM

i really loved it , it gives the reader a very nice feeling can't be dicribed

thank you,

WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

8 posted 2001-04-05 09:59 AM

Thank you all. I do feel some concern, it seems that JM is the only one here that got the full intent of the poem. The use of seasons is purely analogous along with the feel pertinent to them. It really is about a relationship, a marriage that didn't weather the 'winter' and find its new 'spring' on the other side. And that 'I always thought" when I made my promise, when 'we' made 'our' promises, the promises would weather the seasons.
But thanks again for reading and giving me your understanding, view on this piece. Maybe it needs some tweaking, but then, I don't want to just 'tell' it, I want the reader to feel it, so I think I'll leave it as is and see if it will prove itself.

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