prayer for the slowly dying (#2)

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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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0 posted 2001-04-02 11:40 AM

the eye of the storm

Though the world may spin
ferociously fast
and dizzy, my eyes
time after time miss
my appointed path,
I pray to look up
always up
for there is a calm
just past
my fingertips
as far as the eye
can comprehend,
if only my heart will
let me see-
guided footfalls
have no need of worry
nor fear of blindness.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-04-02 11:44 AM

Superbly woven, succinct, yet tender not terse. Well done!

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

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California

2 posted 2001-04-02 11:45 AM

You know, being a diabetic, blind has to be my greatest fear. Slowly dying, or dying on organ at a time, has to be my second greatest. Still, I now where "guided footfalls" lead and will take refuge there.

Good poem

Michael

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2001-04-02 12:02 PM

guided footfalls... what a wonderful image! *S* I must be escaping such guidance, though... for I still seem to find every patch of quicksand. *S* Well done!

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

4 posted 2001-04-02 12:04 PM

Jellybeans.....had a thought in mind until I read Michael's comment. Well written. Bob

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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5 posted 2001-04-02 02:05 PM

VAS thank you much

Michael, my nephew has diabetes, since he was 4, and I have read about the dangers of blindness, so I understand your fear, i guess what I am saying is that i don't want to be blind when my eyes think they see....and yes...not just you...and me...we are all slowly dying, just some faster than others..

suthern...lady, you got your feet on solid ground, you just gotta learn to trust that its not gonna move out from under you

RMW, thank you, have enjoyed reading your work

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

6 posted 2001-04-02 02:31 PM

yanno... people always say -- keep your chin up -- but sometimes they say -- keep your head down...

(hmmm... was just thinking that could be turned into something crude... lol)

but -- it doesn't matter which path -- as long as there are friends on it with you?

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-04-02 09:57 PM

You'll find those footfalls. Hang in there!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-04-02 10:06 PM

very thought provoking piece, here

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

9 posted 2001-04-02 10:18 PM

Faith works wonders my friend, even when things don't go the way we think they should. Well written...applause!!!

jwesley

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

10 posted 2001-04-03 12:28 PM

thanks all, rebel, its good to see you, and yeppers...I keep trying

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