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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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missed you. In my dreams, last night I missed you-- in my dreams--blind-sight missing you in nuzzled chest-- I missed you-- I cannot find rest Missing you, I'll dream, pretend each time I miss? I'll shoot again.. a target centered thru the chest the place of heart where love not rest... and the quiver's knead of enter-- stone in sharp of love engendered... Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful..how could it fall to the bottom..I will not let it if I can keep it upwards.  We're sorry..this heart has been d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d. Should you like to hold the line we'll be glad to reconnect you.. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Serenity, This flows beautifully. Your poetry always touches depths gently, like dipping in and out of thoughts.
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ You 'flow' gently through your thoughts. Squeezing your little 'heart' !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll dream, pretend each time I miss? I'll shoot again.. a target centered thru the chest the place of heart where love not rest... and the quiver's knead of enter-- stone in sharp of love engendered... Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. ======================= yer so cool... ya know? this is deep me twin... yeppers....each time it leaves a scar... in your case... me thinks its a beauty mark   meIt's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"an arrow sharpened love stone me." what a concept, harpo.... geez.... this one's got rhythm and blues with a touch of hope despite the pain.... i dig it, girl! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent, serenity... I like the comparisons you've drawn... missing hurts! *S* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oooh, good one my friend. Very nice images especially at the end. All writing comes |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Couldn't pick out one line if I tried...I loved them all! Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Lovely, moving piece, my friend jwesley |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
go get 'em Kathleen Blake |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
sort of like the "I wouldn't miss you if you would just hold still" theory... Wonderful title, serene one |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh girl...oh yeah do I ever know this feeling |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A most excellent write, my friend, O Serene One... Regards, Sudhir |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You are GOOD. You are VERY GOOD. As I've said repeatedly in various replies - those who write with brevity - write the best poetry. - This brief poem - communicated to me exceptionally well - It goes among my treasures! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Temptress...I thank you much, my friend! For the read and the compliment! Yer loveley! J? that was nice, I like the "dipping in and out of thoughts" thing---describes how I feel about writing perfectly. Thank you! Marge? lol...careful with that heart and how ya squeeze! It's held together with duct tape and superglue! (many times broken) Love ya lots...be well, and stay near! JM---I don't mind the scars so much...it's the growing of them that's painful! Hugs my friend! doreen? biddety bop sho wap alop a bam boom...and scooby doooby! (thought I'd reply in "scat"  ) somehow? I think you understand!suthern? I thank you much. I admire your work much, and your replies mean a great deal to me! You are a gifted poet and a generous friend! LW...hey gal! How's "thangs?" Thanks for your consistently lovely attention...you are a sweetheart. JLR? Gratitude in abundance! I wasn't sure if I "translated"--nice, THANKS. jwesley? How are ya lovie? thanks for popping in, always a treat to hear from you...drop me an e, lemme know how things are going, will ya? Kath? Sometimes I think my "get up and go"? "GOT UP AND WENT..." But people like YOU, and all my good poet people rejuvenate me! Thanks doesn't quite cut it--but know I am ever grateful! Michael...I thank you much. I learn much from reading your work, and continue to study. Much gratitude. Paula...I know you know. Sorry about the other day...will be in touch. Forgive me, but somehow I think ya understand. Hugs and thanks. Sudhir? I just LOVE your spirit. You shine ON, my friend! Thanks you for stopping in to shine on ME! Wils? You touch my heart with your kindness. and this reply? I count among MY treasures. Much grat! Thanks to all, and hugs to forum...yer all too good to me! (but don't stop!)  [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-03-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, this is wonderful. And its so right on target, too. Love it. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This sure hits the bull's eye.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. I love it! girl. don't stop now, ya hear me? Maree |
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