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| Open Poetry #13 |
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friendship(cinquain) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Silent amidst the loud cheery banter of people i hardly know Yet honoured that they included me in their tight cohesive circle |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Hmmmm, we differ in philosophy, however, you've expressed your point well! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
yes..i've been there...and i smiled too  i like this one a lot, faterider  hugs, g where am i...WHOA! and what am i doing in this handbasket!?! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Cinquain is obiviously your thing! True words here. Wonderful job. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen |
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Panne415 Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 104San Antonio |
Kai, I liked this and the double cinquain works well and both are informal cinqauins. Hmmm - can see you even now in this situation. I would suggest that you change the "Yet" in your 2nd cinquain to "I'm"...see what a difference it makes. I think it brings more cohesion and impact to your piece. But that's just me- as always. Glad I saw this - while looking for this I found one by jwesley. So glad I went looking for you - Panne |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful kaile. . . I really liked that you combined the two here. . . wonder if there's a name for a form that includes more than one cinquain??? excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
very good! |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
That's rather magnanimous of you!! Feeling honoured? If I were you, I'd just feel downright lonely and leftout. I don't think I'll have the energy to think of a good reason why they would include me.  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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