Open Poetry #13 |
My Muse Has Returned |
PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I, forced to swallow the most bitter pill, Of the never was, and the never will Shimmering veil of darkest cloth hides eyes Of my muse, once more she comes to descry She sees into the deepest depths of me Because without her, I am incomplete With a rush like wind through the fertile field And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed My loosed thoughts pour forth haltingly at first She stands now before me, moistened lips pursed Far across the field, this ardent meadow I hear a thousand trumpets start to blow I allow myself within her shadow Letting who I was, and never will, go |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
PK - this is wonderful....so much so, in fact your muse has insisted that I place it in my library.... well done Sir....very well done.... |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Powerful depth. This is more than outstanding. I applaud. Wonderful Poetic Knight! I'm saving also. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is wonderful, you do know that Balladeer's muse returned with a suntan! This sounds the opposite but simply marvelous! Kathleen Blake |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I, forced to swallow the most bitter pill, Of the never was, and the never will Shimmering veil of darkest cloth hides eyes Of my muse, once more she comes to descry She sees into the deepest depths of me Because without her, I am incomplete ================================= And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed ================================= Far across the field, this ardent meadow I hear a thousand trumpets start to blow I allow myself within her shadow Letting who I was, and never will, go ============================ thy muse has returned and I am ever grateful *L* so many cool lines in this PK ... so many very well conceived images and poetic phrasings ..... "Of the never was, and the never will" "And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed" "I allow myself within her shadow Letting who I was, and never will, go" and of course your ever impressive mastery of cadence and rhyme. another excellent example of your poetic grace. "She sees into the deepest depths of me" me thinks that is a very very cool view oh you speak to me in riddles |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Sun, and Just...I hope you keep room for some more. *S* Irish, thanks, I prefer my muse to not be allowed in the sun *L* Janet...thanks for appreciating the view as always, for whatever the view shows. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Oh how pretty....a shadowy muse....several lines come to my mind with that little thought alone... |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Lady, those lines are.......? |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
PK~ this is so cool! I enjoyed this very much SEA |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
SEA Thank you very much. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very nice.....its funny how we really aren't complete when our muse is taking a break...you hit it perfect with this |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and I for one, am quite happy. . . excellent my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Pk, glad she's back! Your imagery is great. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well, i won't rip this apart but that i intend to read more of your work from now on.... i love discovering new favourites... |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I must agree with faterider! It's so much fun to discover another favorite and I'm afraid I'm becoming something of a PoeticKnight junkie. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Hmmmm Blue inside and out oh poetic one ...Loved the thought in this piece and the way if flowed...very soothing and melodic.... "And sunlight cascading in my mind unsealed" This line....beautiful imagery PK...awesome poem~ |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
astonishing... the last line is my fav... and i KNOW the feeling. the muse returns with a vengence.... You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Your muse left? Well, what a return! (Mine is stil on hiatus I think!) Powerful writing. |
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